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princess^sarah
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0 posted 2001-03-23 07:55 PM


why did he do it?
you hear people ask
was it his choice
or was it his task?

He must have been sad
or really depressed
he must have been worried
or feeling real stressed.

No-one will know
what went on in his mind
no-one will know
what he was like inside
no-one will know what was needed
to prevent him comitting suacide.

so anyone out there
whos lost someone they love
dont think its your fault
that your friend now,
watches you from above.


© Copyright 2001 sarah alford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-23 07:58 PM


Oh, wow. This is sad. I once had a good friend lose another friend over suicide. That's got to be hard.
Great poem, I like the rhyme scheme. Nice job.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

luvnkris
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2 posted 2001-03-23 10:33 PM



Great poem! suicide sux majorly, i know a few ppl who have been involved with sucidal ppl, and 1 of my old close friends tried it several times! its not good!
thanks for the poem!
Luv Jo
xoxo

* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



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3 posted 2001-03-23 11:51 PM


luv the poem
i 2 once losted a friend back in the early days well.... not really like couple years ago
anyways that poem gave back regretful feelings
keep writin

Elvenblood
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4 posted 2001-03-24 08:49 AM


I lost a friend to suicide....wow, I can't believe how much it still hurts to think of it. Good poem though, and it's going into my library, because...well I don't know. Thank you though

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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5 posted 2001-03-24 01:13 PM


Yes, a lovely poem...
And I don't think it is my fault... I think it is THEIR fault...
I'll say no more than this.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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6 posted 2001-03-24 01:19 PM


I've never been involved with anything like this so I know I can't even imagine how it feels. Good job on the poem though!

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
"Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it."
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7 posted 2001-03-25 02:28 PM


Nice tribute to your friend. my condolences.
I hope everything is ok there.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-04-01 06:11 PM


Good message Sarah
Though it would be nice to prevent these kind of situations
Your friends actions is never a valid option
It never was and never will be

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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