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HappyPretender
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0 posted 2001-03-23 12:46 PM


Why me
What did I do
To be the point of anger
I always screw up
I'm never right
I'm treading this line of danger
Danger of losing
Losing what matters most
I can't get things right
I make no one happy
And this question I ask
Without a response
Why me?

<3~*Rachael*~<3
*we can't become what we need to be by remaining what we are*


© Copyright 2001 Rachael - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-03-23 02:34 PM


Because it happens to everybody. You're not alone and this doesn't only happen to you.
Good luck with whatever's going on.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away
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2 posted 2001-03-23 02:46 PM


Everyone battles with these questions. Remember that.
Good poem

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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3 posted 2001-03-23 05:11 PM


Like Dopey said, this happens to everyone. We all have times in our lives where we ask things like this, and I hope sharing this helped you out. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Lakewalker
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4 posted 2001-03-24 11:27 AM


This told your message well, but the sentences didn't flow really good for me. That's the only thing I see with this one, other than that, it's great

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
"Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it."
BothUnknown

Allan Riverwood
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5 posted 2001-03-24 01:43 PM


I'll agree with Lake... the flow could be patched up a bit more.
But you had great thoughts in here.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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6 posted 2001-03-24 06:03 PM


i think its a question 4 all those who go throught lifes pain and struggles
but i guess some do more sufferin then others and those whos strong will survive

Jenn Cirrincione
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7 posted 2001-03-25 10:51 AM


Oh goshy... if I could answer this for you... maybe I could do the same for myself.
We all have pain and heartache... but what goes up must come down and vise versa, so the dawn does approach, good luck.

Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



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8 posted 2001-03-31 04:15 PM


Some days we feel like evrything goes wrong.
We should just learn to be happy with what we have.
And when someone doesn't appreciate the goodness you've shown, don't let them make you feel that you've never done anything right.
be strong

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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