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HappyPretender
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since 2001-03-06
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Prince George, VA

0 posted 2001-03-23 12:29 PM


I try my best
I can't do it all
I'm always there
To break your fall
Sometimes I miss
When you stumble
You not happy
Makes my world crumble
I entrust you with everything
My life, my heart
Now I feel
Like we're falling apart
I grasp so tightly
Hold on for dear life
And you can't even
Put up a fight
I don't deserve you
For you to be there
I let you down
Left in one's own despair.

This poem is for my best friend. We have recently moved away from each other and are getting more and more distance between us. I feel like I have let her down cuz I'm now there for every stumble but I;m always there for every fall.



© Copyright 2001 Rachael - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-23 12:32 PM


This is a good poem. I know how you feel, and it's hard when friends move away from each other like that. I recently went through the same thing. Good luck.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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2 posted 2001-03-23 02:28 PM


Well maybe you've moved away but the friendship is still there. I hope all turns out well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2001-03-23 04:12 PM


Pink! Hehehe...k I enjoyed the poem. I really like your name...too...umm sho yeh! Peace fer you and yer friend.
~Carly

"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake."
- Leonardo da Vinci

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17
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Maine, USA
4 posted 2001-03-24 08:33 AM


Aww, that's so sad :-( wow, good poem

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2001-03-24 11:30 AM


This one's so packed with your emotions, nice job on it

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
"Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it."
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6 posted 2001-03-25 01:26 PM


this was good. very good. lots of emotions. this could apply to anything, friendship, boyfriend/girlfriend relationship.... very versatile. i love that. great job. i hope your friend gets to read this and you tell her how you feel.


Valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

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7 posted 2001-03-31 04:27 PM


Just remember that we're not perfect and that we can't be there for others all the time.  We too have our own life to live.  This should be a cause of an ending friendship.  Maybe the 2 of you need to sit down and talk.  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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