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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Hey everyone. Well ive noticed alot of stuff has happened while ive been gone in Italy and surgery. everything seems to be very kool though Here's my poem. Standing on the edge of this world gazing down into a void my heart beats faster burning the flames within my soul desperate for happiness begging to be loved lost in sadness and anger Chaos tugging at the seams of my sanity it's a losing battle between life and death as unhappy thoughts race through my mind every idea, every step gets harder insomnia destroys a once happy child the nightmares of the past make their way back, harsh slaps, cruel words beat a steady painful rythm in my mind rough hands tear at the buttons ripping away at everything ringing blister's my ears, a painful shot sears through your body a desperate child searching for answers only finds more impossible questions recalling harsh memories brings only pain but relieves a worried mind a mask covers my face, cracking slowly showing the true person behind, no fake raw emotions tear at my limbs eating away at each other till there is only skin and bone a peaceful mind soothes an angry mind a scared body, trapping a sad soul cracks open to show true blackness Regina |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
   WELCOME BACK REGINA This is another of your darker pieces. You know what I think of your dark stuff- it is your best. This one is no exception to the rule. Definitely one of your better ones. The description, the emotion, it is all brilliantly weaved.  See you around, love. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This seemed really good to me, your wording was really good. "a peaceful mind soothes an angry mind" "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome back, Regina! Great poem. I liked it! Good job. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
Welcome back! Pretty good. Its the first of yours Ive read, so I dont know what your capable of. Keep posting! *Me* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
HEEEeeeeeeeeeey Regi!!!!! Welcome back! I've missed you! *hugs* well this was a nice poem to come back with. Dark, but you do bring that into the forum which is good cuz we can't always have that lovy lovy stuff and blah. Nicely done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
WELCOME BACK!.......Amazing poem. You did a great job on it. ~*Malinda*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
sorry I'm late at reading this It's nice to know you're okay How was Italy? Must be nice  Wonderful job on this piece Ina you havent lost your touch hope to see more "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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