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luvnkris
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0 posted 2001-03-22 08:35 PM




When...

When I’m with you its like nothing else matters
Away from annoying family & friends who are complainers
It’s like an invisible bubble forms around us
Keeping everything unworthy out, for its each other we trust.

When we have little argument its like my world is gonna end
I think about life without you & I know this argument I must mend
Then we both realize how silly & dumb we have been
& its make-up and make-out time like none you’ve seen.

When we have deep & meaningful's it’s like a part of us joins
Intense conversation about life, love & $ coins
You can be so mature and I spose I can too
We get along so well, prevent each other from feeling blue.

When you get on one knee & tell me you love me
Its like my face lights up & in that moment forever I could be
I love you too for you’re my special boy
& whenever you’re around I feel nothing but joy



* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



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1 posted 2001-03-22 08:58 PM


This is a beautiful description of your life. I'm glad to see your relationship is going so well. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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2 posted 2001-03-22 09:47 PM


Yes, this was a nice poem. Had a good layout to it, very well organized.
Quite expressive as well. Lovely job.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


Elvenblood
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3 posted 2001-03-23 08:12 AM


Hey thre, me again, this one's also very sweet! you have a real talent, I can't wait to read more!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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4 posted 2001-03-23 10:33 AM


Aww.. this is really good! Hold on to him You're lucky! Great poem.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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5 posted 2001-03-23 02:29 PM


Good to see all is well with you!
nice poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-03-29 06:54 PM


nice to see you post again
havent seen you in a while
great to know things are great for you
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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