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Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

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Lynchburg, Virginia

0 posted 2001-03-22 01:52 PM

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Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-03-22 01:57 PM

Okay, There are supposed to be tons of spaces inbetween different words and the lines are supposed to be staggered, but they don't show when I edit it... how can I fix it?

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-22-2001).]

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-03-22 09:37 PM

Good poem, the form suited you well, quite interesting.
There is no way to make spaces appear anymore more than once. I know, made me mad too.
There are many ways to change it though, I reccomend Italics. hit HTML help to see all the different options you have available. there are a

LOT

.

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-03-23 12:17 PM

This really struck a chord with me, Marie. The expression was simply amazing. With each stanza you delved into bits of yourself and just displayed it beautifully.
"Am I really the happy person
That I display to the world?
OR...
Am I the broken,
Confused
Ignorant
Stranger that I see in the morning each day?"
I read that and just went 'WOW'. I could really relate to this piece.

Thankyou for such a brilliant piece of writing. This is one of those poems you read every single day.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

4 posted 2001-03-23 08:26 AM

Such a brilliant work...I absolutely love it, and it has some very good thoughts (the whole thing basically)! and it's going into my library. Hope answers start coming.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

5 posted 2001-03-23 08:26 AM

Such a brilliant work...I absolutely love it, and it has some very good thoughts (the whole thing basically)! and it's going into my library. Hope answers start coming.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

WaitN4AnAngel
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since 2001-03-08

Posts 37
I wish I knew where I was...

6 posted 2001-03-23 09:31 AM

Great poem! I feel like I can relate a lot. Just remember, you can only be yourself, and try to do that the best you can before you try to be someone else.

*Me*

*If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything*
*A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things*

WaitN4AnAngel
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since 2001-03-08

Posts 37
I wish I knew where I was...

7 posted 2001-03-23 12:29 PM

Sorry, I wantd to add it to my library, but couldnt!!

*Me*

*If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything*
*A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-03-23 02:58 PM

Marie this was so amazing. I truly connected with this poem. I loved it.......just to show you a little bit of something......
Javier Agosto:
- 110lbs 5'7....way too skinny for a 18yr old male....20lbs under weight and always made fun of.
- C- student in school.....never achieving a B average since 8th grade.
- Never quite big enough to play the sports I loved, but did anyway and got my butt kicked many times.
- No real talents....poetry is as close as I ever came to it and I hardly know anything about poetry.
- No concept of friendship
- No REAL basis for an intellectual mind

I mean look at all my flaws.....complete and listed there for you Marie.
Perfection is an ideal that I feel cannot be reached in the physical world. We are characterized by everything we are including our flaws. Each individual will either COPE with the flaws or FALL due to them.
The strong cope.....the weak fall.
These days the phrase "the survival of the fittest" still applies, but it's changed a bit. No longer can we truly apply our physical capabilities to our maximum potencial because there is no need. It's come down to the fittest MIND.
I think you are great Marie. You have come into these forums and have shown us just how much you can shine. I enjoy reading you and your prescence relaxes me.
I hope you can cope with your flaws. I'd hate to see you fall, but if you do....I'll be there for you and so will your family of friends here at passions.
Good luck!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

[This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (edited 03-23-2001).]

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

9 posted 2001-04-08 10:17 AM

Hey,

Great poem, I am sure you are all of the things you strive to be

until your next great poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

10 posted 2001-04-09 01:17 PM

One of the things that makes you such a great writer is that you experiment with different styles and try to make yourself better all the time. You did a beautiful job with this one, i loved it as always.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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