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0 posted 2001-03-22 01:08 PM


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keoni
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1 posted 2001-03-22 01:56 PM


This is a cool poem. Good imagery. I really liked the ending.
Jon

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2 posted 2001-03-22 05:37 PM


This is a wonderfully written piece. The pen and paper are the writer's greatest gift and, at times, the writer's greatest fear. You describe their power well. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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3 posted 2001-03-22 09:44 PM


Ooh yeah... if I wrote with a pen and paper I'd understand completely! But naw, I just type mine up these days. That way, it's only a copy and a paste before it's a post!
You did a wonderful job. The last part was excellent.
You rule, Marie! If I don't say that often enough...
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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4 posted 2001-03-23 08:15 AM


Oh wow, this is an incredible piece! and it's going into my library, just becaue it it some chord somewhere that I'm not sure of! Thanks!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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5 posted 2001-03-23 08:22 AM


Marie, you are becomming one hell of a great writer. The comparison between the sword and pen was fantastic. Over all, quite a powerful piece.

And Allan. Slave to technology. Go back to basics!! hehe...

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

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6 posted 2001-03-23 09:34 AM


I really like your poetry. Does writing seem like the only way to fight off your hurt? Thats what it sounds like. Keep writing!!

*Me*

*If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything*
*A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things*

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7 posted 2001-03-23 02:25 PM


You did so well on this poem! I truly enjoyed it. VERY VERY VERY well done! wowish

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-03-30 02:57 PM


You did really good.  Yup, the pen is mightier than the sword  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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9 posted 2001-04-01 11:46 AM


This was absoloutely awesome great piece and i'm feeling so inspired. Thanks for sharing this excellent work.
Andrew.

" War is peace,
Freedom is Slavery,
Ignorance is strength" - George Orwell "1984"

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10 posted 2001-04-08 10:13 AM


Hey,

   Yeah I agree with the people who already replied. This is a great poem and I hope you continue write. I love your work you are one of my most favorite poets EVER I live to read your work. Keep it up and until your next superb masterpiece

       -- Linc

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11 posted 2001-04-09 01:13 PM


This is another one of my favorite poems that you've written, the symbolism and imagery in this piece are simply incredible.  my library is dominated by your work (as it should be)

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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