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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
Looking in the water At thatlonely girl Her big sad eyes Her round puffy cheeks Stained with tears Her heart begging For someone to love her Her sould begging For someone to care Then a tear falls From my own eyes As I cry for this lost girl And the tear hits the water And sends ripples through This lonely girls face Then I have to leave But I'll be back I wont leave her lonely Because I know exactly how she feels... *Me* |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a GREAT poem!! I could picture it all in my mind..but it was so sad. Great job hun |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hon, I feel so bad for you! I can really relate to this, and I just hope writing this and sharing it helped you out. If you ever need to talk, feel free to e-mail me at weirdbeetlelady@hotmail.com God bless!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this is a really nice job. I hope that you come back to the water, but as a new person. A person who is much happier. Chin up  good job!Valerie *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
that was realli good! i luvd it! keep writing Luv JO xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh, GREAT job here! Absolutely outstanding! What more can I say? Keeping yourself company is an important skill to master. Poetry is a form of keeping oneself company. So keep it up, girl! I think this is your best so far. It goes to my library so that, when you are an elite member, I can pull it out and see how far you have come from now. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i can totally relate 2 that poem that was written from ur heart.... its like everyday i wake up also where the solitude is trapped by the lonliness & isn't it a tripp that sum have 2 go through that lonliness all by theirselves anyways luv ur writin' keep writin |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Good poem. I know what you're talking about. I liked it. anonymous albert ?, welcome to Passions! It's very admirable that you're replying to someone else's poems before you post. I hope ya like it here. Good job, WaitN. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. I hope all gets well. I'm here if you need me  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautiful imagery I hope things are better now keep writing i love your poems "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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