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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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What would you do, if I told you that this was the end, of our relationship, that I was leaving, and there was nothing, not a single thing, that could change my mind? Would you care that I was leaving, going far far away, leaving you behind, leaving everything I've ever known, moving to a new town, with new friends, new guys? Would you call me every week, like you do now, just to see how I'm doing, to make sure I'm okay, to see if I have any people, that I need for you to beat up, and I never did? Would you hate ****, ( a person's name) and all of them, but especially him, even though I'm leaving him behind too, and going far away, and you hate him, but you don't know him? Would you not say goodbye, because goodbye means forever, and I know I'll never see you again, but you don't want it to be like that, for me to dissappear, and never come back, would you never say goodbye? I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
WOW This was VERY powerful... had a lot of emotion to it. Your questions and phrases cut like knives. Into the library, this one goes. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks Allan. This poem has meaning to me. I've attended school with the same people for nine years (including ****) and I met the guy who is now my ex over the summer, and this is about him, and the other guy (****) and what not. Byes. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is an amazing piece! I loved it! One of the best I think I've read from you. I love the way you ask questions... they made me think. VERY nice job... --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Allysa, this is a... I don't know what to say. This one really hit me hard. I know what it feels like to Never say Goodbye, although I should. Awesome poem, it is REALLY making me think, and I hate that. But it's going into my library anyway. Maybe I do need to think ervery now and then. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I find myself asking a lot of questions, some of which are very weird. Ask Dopey. Back in Teen 3 I gave him a list of interesting questions Thanks!. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Don't lie Allysa, you never sent me Q's....hehe Naaaaa you did....nice poem here though. Me likies.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Hey! Dopey, I'm a good girl. I don't break any commandments. And as far as I know, lying isn't a commandment. ANywyas, thansk. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa, this is a very powerful poem lots of questions I see..... I think you did really good on this one  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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