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TrueLUV
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0 posted 2001-03-21 10:32 PM


Don't hurt so much
I'll always be there
I know you see all the love and care
I have for you
All I am saying is I am sorry I cheated
I have a few things to say
I wish I didn't act so wild at the party
I wish that I had brought you with me
I wish that I can kiss you one more time
I pray that you can forgive me
I pray that one day you could love me the way you used to
All I have to say is that I am sorry I cheated forgive me and this is my last goodbye

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-03-21 10:37 PM


Ooh... great job on this poem.
What did you mean by your "last goodbye?"
This kinda made me tilt my head.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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2 posted 2001-03-21 11:13 PM


Great poem in venting yourself. I cannot support cheating, in fact, I despise it....but I wish you luck.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-03-22 09:07 AM


Seems like you're in a tough situation? I hope things work out for you.
As for the poem, good job in expressingf yourself. Thanks for the nice read.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Elvenblood
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4 posted 2001-03-23 07:46 AM


Wow, pain...the pain in this is obvious, but like Dope there, I'm not a huge fan of cheating. good luck

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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5 posted 2001-03-24 10:44 PM


Wow.... it's a good poem. Like most people though, I have this thing about cheating. I'm not yelling, scolding, anything, don't take it that way. Good luck tho...

Bel

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6 posted 2001-03-25 12:21 PM


I don't think that anyone is a big fan of cheating, but it happens all the same. I too have been in much the same situation. At a party with no one else there. Hanging round with people that considering the circumstances you probably shouldn't be hanging round with and drinking things you shouldn't be drinking. One thing leads to another and before you know it you're way in over your head. It wasn't planned, but it happened. And you can always know that it's going to get back to the one person you don't want it to. I totally know what you're on about.
And I think that you've done a wonderful job identifying those emotions. I too am a little confused about the last line "This is my last goodbye" but I think I might know what you're on about. You get to the stage where, as much as you still love him, you're sick of appologising. You want him back, but you don't want to have to chase him.

"I know they say if you love somebody, you should set them free, but it sure is hard to do, yeah it sure is hard to do, I know they say if they don't come back again, then it's meant to be, but these words 'aint pullin' me through, 'cause I'm still in love with you..." quite ironic that the name of the song should "The long Goodbye".

I wish you all the best. You'll know what to do in the end. In the end there will be only one option. It is the road leading to this option that was a choice.

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7 posted 2001-03-25 08:06 AM


We all make mistakes, and you obviously regret this one. The fact that you regret it, however, doesn't mean that you won't have to face the music. It will only make you learn, though. I don't think you will make this mistake again. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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8 posted 2001-03-25 08:20 AM


I've been in this situation before, both as the cheater and as the cheated. When Justin and I were together he thought I was cheating on him, and he eventually broke up with me because "I talked to Larry more than I did him."

Ok, now to the moral of my story: After the guys broke up with me (because I cheated), they eventually ended up regretting it, and tried to get me back. I was told almost a week ago now that Justin wants me back.

So my "?" to you is: Don you want him back? Think about it, try to talk to him about it, and if he doesn't want to talk about it, give it a lil time, he might come around.

~Tamma

i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened

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9 posted 2001-03-25 10:48 AM


Well, this just sucks now, doesn't it?? I think that flirting is fine but you always have to draw the line... cheating IS wrong... but I'm a big believer in "everything happens for a reason" you may not know it now... but give it time, you'll realize the purpose for the pain. Hehehe I know I'm rambling... Good luck.

Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



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10 posted 2001-03-25 10:54 AM


The feelings will soon evaporate and you will feel better again. Parties are there for acting wild so don't beat yourself up too much. You act in order to learn.

Thanks for posting this. It'll be a good reminder for all the cheaters out there of what they can lose. Hope you start feeling better soon.

~AF~

In my end is my beginning.
~ Mary Stuart ~

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11 posted 2001-03-31 04:24 PM


Yes, we make mistakes and that's natural
I see you feel bad for what has happened
I guess we just have to stand up and accept the consiquences of our actions
hope things get better for you

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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