Teen Poetry #4 |
Untitled, Unfinished, and most of all Unknown |
fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Untitled, Unfinished, and most of all Unknown In my dreams, you always die before me And I cry all of the time I wake up To soak my room in eye-offending brine I always thought of her kind At the front of my mind A flow of consciousness embrace Appearing with endless grace It...you come to kiss me Alas out of time I wake up Time's rounded face doth lie I don't know what it is About my Childish girl who sought after my love A river of sweetness runs deep through my heart Not her a delta but an ocean Can keep us apart. Precious seconds tacked on Like blades of grass upon a lawn Every night of rememberance Brings her to my sub-conscious Beloved dream woman in another realm Let our minds caress and love Soon be together you the tiger And me the dove... "The heart can think of no devotion |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very good. The last two lines especially. Another well written piece. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Another great poem from you. I don't think this one is the best I've read from you, but I still like it. Nicely done. -Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ooooooooooo very nice one! Especially the ending. Wowish, nicely done!!!!!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~very impressive. i liked this alot, keep posting! *kiley ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I really like this piece. It flows beautifully, and we can all relate to the content. Thanks for sharing. "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I see the wuality of poems in this forum is getting better and better. Very impressive my friend. Keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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