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I'll Never Really Believe

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Fading Away
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0 posted 03-20-2001 01:56 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Fading Away

Listening for my voice,
I never hear a sound.
I'm fearing I'll be left alone,
Abandoned,
Never found.

I cry out in the dark,
An eery silent scream,
Denied what I feel,
Forbidden so it seems.
I am so small,
A child without hope,
Hanging on by faith.
I wonder if I deserve this,
And if I'll ever be saved.

I reach for someone's hand,
But there is no one in sight.
Trying to starve,
Trying to eat,
I never get it right.
Opening my eyes,
I try not to look,
Because I know who you are.

I struggle then to hide again,
The past is never far.
I lay awake and tell myself:
"Just be brave,
Be strong.
Someday I will find the truth,
And know I wasn't wrong."

So stay here with me,
Just for one more night,
And sit with me,
Pray for me...
Just tell me I'll be alright.
I wasn't bad,
And I'm not to blame,
But in my heart,
I sit alone, and grieve.
For buried deep within my soul,
I fear I'll never really believe.

--Marie
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1 posted 03-20-2001 02:00 PM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

Yet another superb poem. It will no doubt grace a top spot in my library. Your poetry is extremely good. You' re extremely good, in the past few weeks you have been a member I have seen your work grow from good to superb. I truly hope you continue to grace pip's forms with your excellent work. It brightens my day to see such a bright young girl write so well and use her talent instead of hide it. Until your next masterpiece

-- Linc

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2 posted 03-20-2001 02:14 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I thought this was great. You are really shining in Passions. I see you all over the place and taking an active roll in discussions. You are very fun to read. I like you a lot and the poem was great! Hope to see more!
Thanks for your comments on my poems, by the way!

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I admire it daily

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3 posted 03-20-2001 03:00 PM       View Profile for TearsOfPearls   Email TearsOfPearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TearsOfPearls

Wow...this was a marvelous poem, but the first I have eva read...I've been missing a few things...keep it up, you have a talent for poetry.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

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4 posted 03-20-2001 10:31 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Yes, I thought this was MARVELOUS. You are destined to be one of the shining stars in Teen #4.
I hope you never leave, Marie. See you around.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

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5 posted 03-21-2001 08:26 AM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Thanks so much, Javi! I'm trying to be active at Passions.. I'm glad you noticed Thanks everyone.. these replies mean a lot to me.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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6 posted 03-28-2001 06:26 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

excellent
I think Javi and Allan are wrong
i think you already are.....
keep sharing
id love to read more of your work

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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7 posted 03-28-2001 07:07 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

This is a beautiful piece! I love everything about it! I especally love the last stanza. This is saddingly sweet, and I hope you never stop writing!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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8 posted 04-30-2001 03:24 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

*bump*page one

i thought this poem was amazing in its sense.
great poem...i liked it lots

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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9 posted 04-30-2001 04:16 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

Thanks for bumping this albert, apparently this is one that i missed when i was just starting out here at pip.  i think this is a great piece and that it really shows how far you've come.  this is beautiful, and your recent work is awe inspiring, so i guess you have no where to go but up  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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This poem was AMAZING!!!!!! I absolutely loved it.... i always seem to love your poems as a matter of fact   Well n e way this was one of my favorites from you so PLEASE keep on posting!!!
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11 posted 05-03-2001 06:13 PM       View Profile for AngelPoet87   Email AngelPoet87   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelPoet87

AMAZING, going in my library  
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12 posted 05-03-2001 06:18 PM       View Profile for AngelPoet87   Email AngelPoet87   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelPoet87

>Applauds<
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13 posted 05-04-2001 11:32 AM       View Profile for vixengrl04   Email vixengrl04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vixengrl04

This is so sad, im not really sure what it was in this poem but it really touched my heart and made me want to cry.  VERY well-written I enjoyed it quite a bit and I really hope that I see more work from you soon!!  Good job 4 sure!  

~*Nikki*~

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14 posted 05-04-2001 02:50 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Wow.. all of my old work is being brought back up, heh.  
Thanks for the replies.  

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

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15 posted 12-11-2001 10:20 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Isn't it amazing how we always strive for this images of total happiness when we can never really just be happy with us?

Once again, another brilliant piece of writing. You write with such Passion that it is impossible to turn away. I like that.  

Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

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I really loved this one...I think everyone feels they've kind of been left drifting sometimes. Beautifully written
~K

We need guidance, we've been misled
Young and hostile but not stupid-
~It may sound absurd but don't be naive
Even heroes have the right to bleed

 
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