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Heavens Tears
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0 posted 2001-03-20 08:42 AM


When I needed somebody on my side
Where were you?
When I was crying there on the edge
Where were you?
While I waited for a helping hand
Where were you?
While I wished that I were gone
Where were you?
As I layed alone, sobbing in the dark
Where were you?
When I was at the lowest point in my life
Where were you?
While I dreamed of leaving this world
Where were you?

You say you've always been there
But how could it be true
As I sat wishing for someone
Where were you??



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1 posted 2001-03-20 12:59 PM


Wow... 0 posts? I can't believe that! Well, this poem is great. It hit me kind of hard. Awesome job!

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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2 posted 2001-03-20 02:11 PM


This was outstanding!!!!!!!!!!!!! I thank you for reposting this poem. I see that you've added a few more lines to it and they add a LOT of emotion to the poem. I simply love how it's read now!
Nicely done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-03-20 02:54 PM


This is so sweet! Althought it could be a love poem good or love poem bad, depending on if you're happy about who you have, or angry at who you had. Anyway, good poem :-)

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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4 posted 2001-03-20 10:28 PM


I must be missing something here...
well I thought it was good, but not as good as everyone else thought.
You have done better, in my opinion.
But now I'm not normal, and they are gonna pick me last when PIP plays softball.
But they do that already anyways.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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5 posted 2001-03-21 09:52 PM


This is an excellent question to be asking...its good that you realized now that this person is only there for you in their mind and not their actions. Great poem!
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6 posted 2001-03-21 09:55 PM


Great job here~its hard when someone supposively is there for you then when you need them the most they're no where to be found. its tough...but we all make it one way or another. great job here, keep it up

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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7 posted 2001-03-22 09:45 PM



this poem was fantastic!
so sad tho
who was it writing about? a friend/family?
Luv Jo
xoxo

* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



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8 posted 2001-03-23 08:39 AM


This poem is pretty much talking to everyone in my life who ever said they were there, b/c half of them werent.

*~*Me*~*

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9 posted 2001-03-30 02:44 PM


These are times that shows us who is true or not.  Hope things are better for you.  thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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