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sherm
Member

since 2000-07-21

Posts 94
Evansville,IN

0 posted 2001-03-20 01:05 AM

i hate this world
is that so wrong?
it makes me sick
so i write this song
im tired of it all
it gives me a nervous twitch
people remind me
of a bad foot itch
go away
just shut up
your worthless babble
has filled my cup
i want no more
you can keep it all
it makes me yearn
to beat my head on the wall
im filled with anger
that iv felt so long
i hate the world
is that so wrong?

Its better to be hated for who you are than loved for who you are not

[This message has been edited by sherm (edited 03-21-2001).]

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

1 posted 2001-03-20 06:10 AM

Again - ...bitter...

the worlds full of evil things and annoying people, change what you can, and shoot the jerks...

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-03-20 09:57 AM

I agree, Evenblood. Great poem. I hope to see more from you..

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

3 posted 2001-03-20 03:31 PM

Hehe...absolutely love this one! Great poem, angry and a little bitter, but great poem!

Keep it up

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

4 posted 2001-03-20 06:38 PM

Sherm, Very nice piece. Angry writing, what I like most, and what I'm best at. I can totally see where you're coming from in ALL aspects of this one. Bad Ass! Hope to see more.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-03-20 10:46 PM

Yes, excellent job. Although I didn't like how you mentioned you were "writing this song" in it. Made it sound a bit cheesy.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-03-21 01:27 PM

Wonderful poem sherm! Thanks for posting this! I hope to see a lot more from you!

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