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Heavens Tears
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0 posted 2001-03-19 03:33 PM


I really thought
That it was real
But now I see
That I was blind
To everything
I didnt want to see
And even though
It never really ended
It more of just stopped
And I wonder which is worse

Still not knowing
What could have been
Had it not ended
On and unhappy note
My anger would have ended
And all could have been well
Had we not been torn apart
By forces we didnt control

Now I regret
Every moment we lost
That we never again will gain
I dont know
That my heart is ready for it
That I can handle more tears
But I always will wonder
And I mention it to no one
For it will always be
My little secret
From them all

This is to the one guy I thought I loved, but whether or not it was real, I will never know, b/c of the pain that Im scared to feel again...


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Elvenblood
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1 posted 2001-03-19 05:43 PM


Aww, that's so sad! I hope you're ok

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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2 posted 2001-03-19 05:52 PM


hey
this was really good. i think i know what you're going through. my boyfriend broke up with me thursday and we had been going out 9 months. it was the worst thing i have ever expercienced...and the pain was so horrible i couldn't explain. it still is horrible. but always know, that god never gives you anything you can't handle. that's what my sister told me and she's right. things will always turn out for the best. trust me. if you ever need to talk just e-mail me.

~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

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3 posted 2001-03-19 07:25 PM


Hey,

This is really good I enjoyed reading. Until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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4 posted 2001-03-19 08:01 PM


I liked this one. It's kind of sad that your fears of expressing yourself as a whole is what is crushing your chances of becoming whole. Don't you think you should give it a chance? For me, speaking for all the hopeless romantics out there, Love is all reigning and all powerful. To deny love is to deny yourself.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood
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5 posted 2001-03-20 09:46 PM


As usual, I disagree with Javier.
If it hurt you the first time, then don't be afraid to let it go. I would personally not try to dwell on one person so much. We are, as humans, capable of falling in love more than once.
So move on.
Good poem, by the way.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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6 posted 2001-03-26 07:14 PM


"Every moment we lost
That we never again will gain"

I love these lines
I'm not here to give you advice
everyone else is gonna do that
yes, your poems are good
they're actually very expressive
thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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7 posted 2001-03-26 07:21 PM


Great job on this one. You do write very expressive poetry. I enjoy reading them. Thank you for sharing. Keep posting.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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