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princess^sarah
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0 posted 2001-04-03 03:48 AM


My heart was once so open,
Not afraid to love or care,
Not scared of being hurt,
Nothing did it fear,

Then along came Mr. Nice guy,
Who filled my heart with joy,
I thought he'd treat me better,
Than any other boy,

My thoughts were oh so wrong,
He tore my heart in two,
My heart that once had the power to love,
Didn't know what to do,

Now to afraid to love,
And even more afraid to care,
So scared of being hurt,
Everything my heart will fear,

My heart was once so open,
Now it's driving me insane,
What did I do to deserve this,
Now i'm suffering in pain



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Empty tears
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1 posted 2001-04-03 08:55 AM


Wow. I can really relate to this poem, so deep,yet so plainly stated. i liked this a lot.
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2 posted 2001-04-03 07:59 PM


Very nice, i liked it!!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-04-03 08:41 PM


Your flow is excellent and yes, when we open our hearts, it hurts.
Just keep it open because a closed heart - well, we can't breath!

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4 posted 2001-04-03 09:38 PM


Very realistic.  How true this is... When we love someone we're giving that person the power to hurt us.
Anywho, nice poem.  Great flow.  Keep posting.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

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5 posted 2001-04-18 05:02 PM


I guess all you can do is wait and it'll heal.  Thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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6 posted 2001-04-18 05:22 PM


No one deserves that, but trust me, in time, it will get better.  

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Deranger
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7 posted 2001-04-18 06:25 PM


No matter how much you think you know about love, it always has a lesson in store...Why was getting hurt ever a part of learning to love?  Who knows?  Good thing too, cause if anywho knew whose idea it was, he'd probably get lynched!  

Ah, anyway, sorry this happened to you and good work.

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