End of The World - Awe at Destruction

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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2001-03-19 01:51 PM

Great massive city in ruin
Standing up to distant skies
Last breaths of fire and smoke escape
In dimented freedom it flies
Away from this dead place, agape.

Howling a haunting cry in vain
Great chasms fill'd with empty lost hate.
Last breaths of fire and smoke escape
End and death seal'd witness to fate.
Bodies strewn, tossed, mouths agape.

Shall we begin again the dance of evolution pure and sweet?

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

1 posted 2001-03-19 05:27 PM

Nice one Fractal. Not the most outstanding but this one still toted great imagery and the choice of format suited a piece like this.

Keep them coming Fractal.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

2 posted 2001-03-19 05:32 PM

Oh this is brilliant. And I'll admit, most of your work doesn't seem to scream out to me, but this one has something in it that... I'm not sure, it's like a hook, like the intro to the song "For What It's Worth" by Buffalo Sprinfield, it just holds you!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

3 posted 2001-03-19 07:35 PM

Hey,

This is a great poem keep up the great work

this was fantastic.

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-03-19 08:11 PM

Frac. very nice poem here. Some of it kind of threw me off but the bulk of it was understandable and very pleasing to read. You are such a talented writer and I challenge you to a sword fight.....haha

Hope to see you post more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-03-20 01:02 PM

"Howling a haunting cry in vain
Great chasms fill'd with empty lost hate."

This is great! I loved it... wonderful job.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

6 posted 2001-03-20 10:09 PM

Yeah... this was pretty good. The last line was VERY well done. I thought it was the highlight of the poem, and you probably did that on purpose.
And about what Javier said? *draws a sword* I'll take the winner.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-03-22 08:18 AM

*click*
there we go.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-03-29 06:35 PM

I've noticed that you write a lot about war or destruction
hmmmmm....any particular reason why?
I'd like to see you write about happiness
thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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