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Hallucination
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0 posted 2001-03-19 10:34 AM



Time's been standing still, since the day I let you go.
And since that second, the sun has never shown,
night and day had become one.
I try to forget but a memory can't be lost.
I can't turn the lights down low,
and I have paid the ultimate prize.
I want you back no matter what it cost

Looking back on the times we shared together,
and now you're just a vision in my dream.
If you read the stars, they say I'll love you forever.

I have been waiting, for this moment for a long time.
Since the door closed, and I cut the line,
still you're always on my mind.
In my every dream I'm holding you in my arms.
Can't see you standing in the light,
so I have paid the ultimate prize.
I want to feel the love of your charm.

And now I'm starting to lose my faith,
every mirror that I look in I see your face.
But than it just suddenly fade away,
Oh, how I wish if you had stayed.

Looking back on the times we shared together,
and now you're just a vision in my dream.
If you read the stars, they say I'll love you forever.

© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
Fading Away
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1 posted 2001-03-19 11:54 AM


This is so beautiful, I can't believe no one has replied yet! Great job.. I love the imagery. Maybe you should give this to the person you were talking about? Great poem.. Thank you for the very good read.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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2 posted 2001-03-19 11:59 AM


This is quite sad. I thought you wrote this very nicedly and I look forward to more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
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Limbo
3 posted 2001-03-19 12:46 PM


This is so sad yet so sweet at the same time. I didn't really like the format but each to their own.

I hope to see more posts and replies soon.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Elvenblood
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4 posted 2001-03-19 05:20 PM


Wow, you are incredible you know that? Watch out Master, got a rival here in my opinion, but time always tells doesn't it?...

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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The Backstreet Boy
5 posted 2001-03-19 07:53 PM


AWWW how nice.
Keep up the good work.
-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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6 posted 2001-03-25 05:30 PM


This is the second one today of yours that I've read
And both reactions are the same after reading
You have some serious talent my friend
very romantic poem
keep posting

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Pixie-Babe03
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7 posted 2001-03-25 08:45 PM


this is incredible! so sad though. great work! i look forward to more

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

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