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Zombie Man
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0 posted 2001-03-18 08:46 PM


So many things in our lives cause pain.
Somethings we can change, but others we can't.
Everybody wishes to fix their lives.
While in reality we can't.
Hate, angier, guilt, is a door holding use back.
Struggling to break it down and get threw.
The only thing we can really do is wait.
Talking, love, hope, are the key to opening a new kind of life.
But one thing that is good and yet also bad,
Is time.
Time, is one who can fix things.
And yet bring down a man's life.
All show struggles in their life.
And lose most hope.
If only we could stop everything now.
Maybe hope will be for us.
Maybe.
Just maybe,
We will get threw this.

© Copyright 2001 Michael Cheeseman II - All Rights Reserved
fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
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Lessburg Virginia
1 posted 2001-03-18 09:16 PM


It's nice to see a little variety in people's poetry. I really like this poem, but it seems more suited for a novel know what I'm saying? Good philosophy. BTW, don't mean to be mean or anything, but it's "through" not "threw".

"The woods are lovely, dark, and deep
But I have promises to keep
And miles to go before I sleep
And miles to go before I sleep"
-Robert Frost

anonymousfemale
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Limbo
2 posted 2001-03-19 11:37 AM


A nice little piece of writing.

Cool SN though. Zombie man..kick ass.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

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3 posted 2001-03-19 12:33 PM


I liked it........like W.H. Auden said in his poem "As I walked out one evening"

- In headaches and in worry vaguely life leaks away and Time will have his fancy To-morrow or To-day-

Nicely done here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-03-25 05:16 PM


I think you did really good on this one
I actually like it a lot
You have brought up some good points here
Something for us to think about
Thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Fading Away
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5 posted 2001-03-25 10:03 PM


This is a REALLY good poem. This morning I wrote something about time, and about how time's always changing, and we can choose how to deal with that. We can live in the past, or take on the future, but whatever we decide, time keeps changing.
Anyway, great poem. Thank you so much for sharing.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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6 posted 2001-03-25 10:06 PM


great poem good message..keep it up

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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