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Sweet Surrender (An oldie but a goodie) =p

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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 03-18-2001 08:04 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Ceinwyn

I'm scared and alone
Tired of being strong
I long to let go
Just for tonight
I want some time
To let it all finally sink in deep, to brand my fragile yet strong mind
I want to surrender my stubborn soul
And show raw emotion
Without fearing to lose everything
God, why is my heart afraid to sing to him
When he's made it perfectly clear
That he will never use what I say
Against me nor ever leave me in this cold cruel world
How much longer
Do I need to keep up this brick wall
Surrounding my soul
Blocking all possible emotions
That should be taking their toll
Yet instead I no longer allow myself to cry
But I'm afraid I'm going crazy
With these nerves of steel
I gave up my heart under my own free will
To another human being
Someone whose soul is rare and true
But I'm lost, I no longer know what to do
I get deeper and deeper letting time take its toll
Is this truly love?
These emotions, these needs
Wanting to break down just for once
To want to surrender to them
Showing them that sometimes it's hard being strong
And that you're just like them
A human being..
Reaching out
Searching, asking and longing for real love…

"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

© Copyright 2001 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
anonymousfemale
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1 posted 03-19-2001 11:36 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

This has been printed out and is in my room right now as I type this.

It's amazing. Truly amazing. I can't believe it is on page two with no replies. Oh well, back to page one it will go.

Thank you for this piece. It'll come in handy some day.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Fading Away
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2 posted 03-19-2001 11:46 AM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

This is a really good poem, and the expression in it is beautiful. Nice job, it's going into my library!

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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3 posted 03-19-2001 12:36 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Oh wow!!! This was completely awesome! This was fantastic! I loved this poem! You've managed to express yourself VERY well!

wowish

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 03-24-2001 02:36 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

beautiful
simply beautiful
i love your way with words
hope you keep posting more
thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Elvenblood
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5 posted 03-24-2001 09:04 AM       View Profile for Elvenblood   Email Elvenblood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elvenblood

That's so beautiful! :-) I absolutely love it!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 03-24-2001 01:25 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Very nice... but I've seen better from you.
Still, very nice.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Lakewalker
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since 08-05-2000
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7 posted 03-24-2001 03:53 PM       View Profile for Lakewalker   Email Lakewalker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lakewalker

I really like this one a lot, great job on it!

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
"Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it."
BothUnknown

Kosetsu
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8 posted 02-07-2002 08:15 PM       View Profile for Kosetsu   Email Kosetsu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kosetsu

Hey Kris,

This was amazing. I understand perfectly what you meant to say.

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

Ceinwyn
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9 posted 02-09-2002 04:23 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

*bump* just bc I can and plus I loves this poem, even though I wrote it a long time ago..but I'm sooo feeling it!!
 
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