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Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-03-18 07:06 PM

This time there's no right or wrong
Just want to relive this moment on and on
Just sharing every losy memory together
Holding your hand, feeling loved
I want to live like this forever

Please take my hand this silent night
Above the clouds you and I are going to fly
Feeling your soft lips against mine
Touching your heart, feeling loved
More than a vision in a dream

The night is calling,
can't you hear it.
There's something in the air,
can't you feel it.
There's something about the stars the moonlight,
something about this beautiful sight.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-03-18 08:13 PM

I thought this was such a beautiful poem. You are very talented.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

2 posted 2001-03-18 09:19 PM

You should be proud, this is an excellent poem. Just one question, in line 3, is that word supposed to be lousy? I just see "losy" and I have no idea what it is.

"The woods are lovely, dark, and deep
But I have promises to keep
And miles to go before I sleep
And miles to go before I sleep"
-Robert Frost

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

3 posted 2001-03-18 10:22 PM

I enjoyed this very much..
Well done!

~*Peachy Be*~

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2001-03-19 11:45 AM

Not a favourite but still a good piece from you.

I hope to see more.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-03-19 11:47 AM

You are a very skilled poet. I like your work.. keep posting. Very good job on this one.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

6 posted 2001-03-19 04:52 PM

Again, this is sweet! :-) I've seen two poems and I'm sure I'll love all your work, keep posting!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-03-24 11:08 AM

This is such a beautiful poem...amazing job

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-03-31 03:47 PM

Syuc a sweet and enjoyable read. You did good on this on my friend. I hope you share more

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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