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DYME
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0 posted 2001-03-18 04:02 PM


What I Am *3/16/01*

You see my honey-brown skin
-Ohh she so concieted

You see my permed straight hair
-She ain't real

You hear the way I speak
-She so stuck up

You see the clothes I wear
-She all up-itty

You see me and my friends
-she just perpitraiting

You hear the music I listen to
-She ain't a real sista

You observe me closely, the things I do and the way I present myself.
-She tryna be white. She ain't all that.

Well if I ain't all that, why are you giving me all of your attention, spending all of your time looking at me and what I am?

----------------------------------------------------This is to prove to people that, it doesn't matter how you act, look, or speak. Just as long as you're respecting yourself and being true to yourself.

NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17

© Copyright 2001 Shunte' D. - All Rights Reserved
fozzyozzy
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1 posted 2001-03-18 04:07 PM


Cool structure in your poem. It kinda reminds me of Maya Angelou in a way. BTW, neat signature, sorta like...BAM!

"The woods are lovely, dark, and deep
But I have promises to keep
And miles to go before I sleep
And miles to go before I sleep"
-Robert Frost

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-03-18 05:55 PM


I thought this was very different. I liked the style. I haven't seen you around, nice to meet you. I encourage you to post and reply more now that you're back in our wonderful home of poets and friends.
I agree with the message and I think it's good that you stated it. Be true to yourself.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
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Limbo
3 posted 2001-03-19 11:11 AM


Very, very good poem DYME.
Being true to yourself will always prevail over any other rubbish people try to put on you.
Always do what YOU want and never fall victim to these ridiculous stereotypes society has to offer us.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Elvenblood
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Maine, USA
4 posted 2001-03-19 04:44 PM


Oh this is perfect! I love this, if only half the people I know that judge others would change, I'd be the happiest person ever: I'm working on it! great job here

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Fading Away
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5 posted 2001-03-20 01:23 PM


Great style. It caught my attention and really gave a lot to the poem. Great job.
Welcome to Teen#4.
Again, good job on this.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

DYME
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since 2000-07-29
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Texas
6 posted 2001-03-20 01:49 PM


Thank You. I really enjoyed wirting it. I thought that I would put this one in the teen forum because I know that teens like me could relate to it more than any one else.

NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17

keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC
7 posted 2001-03-20 06:02 PM


Good job on this piece.Very different style. I will be looking for more.
Jon

Allan Riverwood
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8 posted 2001-03-20 10:41 PM


Ditto to Dopey's speech. (He's a big moderator now. hehe...)
This was an interesting style... you could have used a different way of expressing the hyphenated lines. Perhaps italics? Hit the "html help" button to find out how to use these.
Great job, either way. Nice to meet you.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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9 posted 2001-03-28 05:34 PM


one thing...AMEN to your words of wisdom  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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