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The one that got away
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The one that got away |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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When I'm asleep, I dream of you, When I awaken, I think of you, When I manage to move about, All I can do is wonder where you are now. I think of all those days, I was around you, And of all those nights you held me close, I was so happy, Nothing but sheer delight. Something happened, And I got scared, I ran away from you, I tried to move on. And yet, here I am wondering... "what- if's" flailing about in my mind, I'm left here missing "us", Now merely a photo-album of regrets. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Radical. I love the last line "a photo album of regrets" Hope to see you post again. "The woods are lovely, dark, and deep |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
I love this...reminds me of that special person that all ya'll know about  i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nicely done jenn! i thought this was great! Quite sad, but still you wrote thise very well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Aww it doesn't help reading a sad poem AND listening to sad music at the same time.  Pulls on the heart strings Jenn. Nicely written. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this a lot. It's hard to give something like that up, and go from one day having someone be there for you, and the next knowing you hurt someone... wow, I know exactly what you're talking about, can you tell  Very good poem. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks guys.. your replies mean a lot!! I luv you all!!! LOL Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Its true what they say...one decision can effect your whole life. Im sorry you regret your actions but u obviously did it for a reason. Great poem |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Something happened, And I got scared, I ran away from you, I tried to move on wow, that's so sad! That hurts a lot when a girl does that, or a guy. Bad memories. "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very good job on this one, Jenn. I loved the last line, I think that it sounded quite professional! "A photo album of regrets..." Very good display of your skill here. I'm impressed, truly. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I really like this piece. Full of regret and longing... I can relate! You express yourself beautifully, however. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Good job Jenn just remember, it's never too late give him the poem see what he says "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this need 2 be on page one.. this is such a beautiful poem.. the last verse came to me in a strong thought i liked it much as every1 else has.. keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Hey Jenn this was a great poem it's sad though to read poems like this from you. I relate way to well and I know how painful it is sometimes. Any how try not to let it eat you up to much, just try to learn and from these types of situations. (Cliche, but it's true) ~Jason |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This one was great. Why did it take me so long to find it? Hmmm. It seems everyone else has already replied. Well, the point is, I didnt miss a great poem, I caught it just in time! *~*Amanda*~* |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks everyone! This one's a little old, but Albert said he hadn't read my work... so I sent him searchin'. Thanks for the replies!! Jenn "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
wow, i'm really glad this one was brought back up, i really like it a lot. the wording was beautiful and the ending gave me chills it was so well written. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is amazing. hope the pains gone or goes soon. katie if you don't let them in they can't see the real you |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks again... "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Awwww this is sad!  So sorry to hear about your regrets, sounds like a painful situation. But I'm sure the feelings will pass and I wish you luck. I like this.  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
"what if's" SUCK! Great job. |
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