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Ses
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since 2001-03-16
Posts 14
The Mountain State

0 posted 2001-03-16 06:20 PM


How was I supposed to know,
If you never let it show?

Things have changed now,
And I feel so alone, somehow.

He played my heart like a toy,
He was nothing more than an immature boy!

I gave him my heart and something more
But he was looking for a “score”.

You told me not to fret,
That I can show you my secret.

I don’t want my heart broke again,
If he hurts me, he will not win.

You say I can trust you,
But I don’t know what to do . . .

© Copyright 2001 Tamma M. Offenstein - All Rights Reserved
Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17
Posts 409
Maine, USA
1 posted 2001-03-16 06:27 PM


Aww, that's such a shame. Wellguys can all be asses (you know, donkeys ;-) ) and anyway, welcome and this is a great poem.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Fading Away
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since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia
2 posted 2001-03-16 06:41 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS

I hope you enjoy it here. Great first post. It sounds like things with the guys aren't going too great? Well, I hope things only get better. Welcome, again.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Allan Riverwood
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since 2001-01-04
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Winnipeg
3 posted 2001-03-16 07:03 PM


Good first post! The form is quite simple, and the message is quite powerful.
Very well done. Welcome to Passions.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


Linc
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy
4 posted 2001-03-16 10:37 PM


Hey,

So some guys are jerks not all guys are jerks like me I am not a jerk ( I don't think I am a jerk well then again I guess most guys that are jerks don't think their jerks OMG I could be a jerk and not know I am a jerk I have got to aks people if I am a jerk) Well back to the poem this is a great first piptalk poem and oh I should WELCOME YOU to piptalk to so welcome well until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

sweetstuff101
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
5 posted 2001-03-16 10:42 PM


I know what you mean!! It reminds me alot of a poem I just read a few days ago. Well awesome job, it flows well!! Keep writing!!

lotsa luv,
~*~SweetStuff~*~


~*~SoMe dAy U'll CrY 4 mE bUt I wOn'T cRy 4 U, sOmE DaY U'll MiSs Me LiKe I MiSsEd U, SoMe dAy U'll nEeD mE LiKe I nEeDed U, sOmE DaY U'll lOvE Me BuT

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
6 posted 2001-03-16 11:19 PM


Actually it seems like you DO know what to do. If you know this guy only wants the winky winky stuff then c'mon!!! What's the point in sticking around with him?!
Anyhow, I think you have a lot of growing to do poetry wise. I think you have a great basis for now, and this place will aid you in becoming great. We ALL have so much to learn and I encourage you to read all the poets here and learn as much as possible!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

niceguy
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since 2000-11-13
Posts 113
Sapello, NM, USA
7 posted 2001-03-16 11:56 PM


Hey, first off, welcome to passions...and second, this is an AWESOME poem Ses! For real. this has a lot of feeling behind it...sorry that you had to go through something like this though. Hope it all works out and keep up the good work k?
C-ya

"Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts."

Acies
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Twilight Zone
8 posted 2001-03-20 08:12 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

sorry I'm a little late in getting to this, but better late than never
You've expressed yourself clearly
hope things do get better for you
keep sharing

Thanks for deciding to join our family here in Passions for Poetry. I know you will enjoy reading as well as sharing. You should also find everyone in here really nice and warm.

ps. pls check you email

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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