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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy 
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Sometimes I wish really hard Just to tell you the truth about me. Just maybe let down my guard To let you in, to make a friend. My wishes, my dreams, fade away. Reality sets in, true once more. I silently cry for help, and the Tears again hit the floor. -- Linc I must warn you this is not close to my best work. I wrote this at 12am becuse I had a 12 page paper to write and was board and lonely at the time. My trust me I know the punctuation is horrid but hey its 12am so I really don't care. I have to get some sleep so until my next poem ( Hey thats the first time I said that)  cya soon. "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! I'm so glad that you decided to join our "Family of Friends"! This is a wonderful first post. It is always hard to open up to a new person and allow them to be your friend. You describe the situation well. Thanks for sharing, and keep up the good work! PS-check your e-mail!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 03-16-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
First of all, I'd like to say it's admirable of you to have been in here awhile replying to poems before posting your own first. It shows you have a great deal of patience, and that is a good virtue. The poem wasn't too bad, but I could see how you could have done better. It's tough to be magnificent in such a small space, without using Senryu/Haiku or Tanka, or course.  Welcome to Passions, although you have been here awhile already. I hope to see more of you. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a really good poem. I loved it... I really like your style. *click* into my favorites. Very nicely done. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Thanx for all the nice comments and hope to see more of your and others comments and poems until then-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea, Allan noticed what I noticed while reading the poem. You had a few replies before you even posted your own poem. Most people don't do that, God knows I didn't. Anyhow, I thought the poem was just fine. It didn't seem like one of those I'm-too-tired-to-care-how-the-poem-comes-out kind of poem. I liked it. Very well done and I hope to read more of you!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
I like it! As much as I like short poems a lot of times, I hardly EVEr write them, I'm more of a realist to apply an artist term. I want to explain things and have them visual (usually). But great work! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey Guys, Thanx again for the replies its kind of like getting mail when your a kid you like wait and wait for something to come and then the mailman/mailwoman comes to the door and you have something it just makes you feel good. Thats how I feel when I read my replies. Thanks of reading and repling it mean alot to me -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Some times I used to write me best work at like 3 AM...of course over the summer that was about the only time I wrote poetry...and I have gotten over that bad case os insomnia since then. Well great work on this one, even if its not ur best! Keep writing!! Lotsa Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Hey this a pretty cool poem especially for 12 am in the morning... and the fact that you've already had loads of posts... can't wait to see more of your work. Zu Love is a friendship caught on fire. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
whether it's your best or not, I'm still impressed Welcome to Passions!!! Enjoy reading and sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
 WELCOME!!  Hey Welcome to Passions, I can't wait to read a poem that you spent awhile on, this was great..looking forward to more!*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
If I haven't already said this............... Welcome to Passions!!!!!!!! even though you've been here for a while, I just thought I'd say that. Plus, this is a great poem. It's the truth for most people. I'm hyper right now.  See, that's what a mountain dew and a gigantic pixi stick will do to ya! N e ways, untill your next poem,Allysa I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Er..sorry I thought I replied to this.  WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!! Booya! Go that sugar. Now on a serious note (ha!) a nice little entry into passions. Your last two lines really stuck in my mind. I await more pieces.  ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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