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starryeyed999 Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 35 |
"One Day" One day I might just lose it I might get the courage that I need To tell you all that you mean to me. I'm afraid of what you'd say Afraid you wouldn't feel the same. One day we might exchange some words, Although they wouldn't mean what they did before, I wish everything could go back to how it was. Until that day, I sit here and think About how I let you go I know if I wasn't so caught up with 'him', I could still be here with you. <*Lacy*> "I can only please one person a day. Today is not your day. Tomorrow doesn't look good either. I'll get back to you." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice job, Starryeyed. A quick, worthwile read. I enjoyed it. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really like this! I know how that feels, actually. I loved it. Nicely done... and I hope things get better for you.  --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought it was ok. Not your best. Hope to see more though!  |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I think you've said what you truly feel very clearly. I do believe though that if you find it in you heart to, you can write really amazing poems. I can see the talent "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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