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0 posted 2001-03-15 11:00 PM


Is there a meaning to life?
Is there any Reason to smile?
Is there a reason to cry?
Is living worth the while?

Is anyone real?
Or do they all just pretend?
Will my heart heal?
Or will the hurt never end?

Are promises kept?
Are they all just a lie?
Is there more reason to live?
or more reason to die?

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1 posted 2001-03-16 09:22 AM


hmm... you're in luck. I don't feel mean enough to really do a good critique. Keep in mind that a rhyming poems usually sounds better with a syllibical pattern though. I'm so glad you started writing poetry. It's great to have someone to discuss it with. V

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2 posted 2001-03-16 10:12 AM



No, yes, yes, yes...
No, yes, yes, yes....
No, yes, yes, no.....

Good poem. Made me really think. (obviously)
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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3 posted 2001-03-16 11:02 AM


Oh wow, well the point is, go on living, And it's a great poem if you ask me.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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4 posted 2001-03-16 04:44 PM


This was really good! I love the way you wrote it with all questions. Nicely written.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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5 posted 2001-03-16 11:03 PM


Nicely done, I liked this. I thought it flowed pretty well.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-03-17 10:41 AM


This is great I especially liked the way it flowed and the rhyming scheme.
Zu

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7 posted 2001-03-21 06:33 PM


The questions that surround us in life.
you've shown your feelings really well
and yes, life is worth it and even more
one day, you'll realize this
all you need to do now is stay strong

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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8 posted 2001-03-21 08:17 PM


These are some tough questions, my friend, and questions that we all ask ourselves at one time or another. You portray these things well, my friend. I hope you shall find your answers soon. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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9 posted 2001-03-25 02:09 PM


You bring up very good questions in this poem, the kind of questions i think everyone finds themselves asking. This poem really made me think...
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