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~sugarpie313~
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0 posted 2001-03-15 09:34 PM


I just want to hear the words
Of how much I mean to you,
Is that too much to ask?
For you to tell me too.

Hearing it from everyone else
Is not something I like,
I want to hear the words
Come from your mouth alike.

I want to know I'm appreciated
To know that you do love me,
That I'm more then a girl on your arm
Who is there for your friends to see.

Please tell me that I'm wrong
And I'm something very special to you,
Because right now I don't see it
And I don't feel it all the way through.



*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

© Copyright 2001 Valerie - All Rights Reserved
CLBinLOVE
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1 posted 2001-03-15 09:37 PM


aight, well, first of all, if he got u to date him, than he must love you, cuz this shows how great you are!
hehe anyway i like the wording, good sense of feeling :-)

let the fighting words lie
let the candle light die
let the sun come up
let the same imply
~EvE 6


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2 posted 2001-03-15 09:41 PM


Wow... powerful critique message.

Um... boy she's talented! I think this is great, I wish she'd post more!
Oh that's sad. The poor girl.
I'd treat her better. yeah, that's right...
she should ditch him and go for ME! haha...

well that's what was in my head while reading it.
Great job. post more!
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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3 posted 2001-03-15 09:46 PM


Nicely done....I liked the poem and thought it was written well.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-03-16 10:29 AM


Very nicely done... emotion-filled too. I loved it.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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5 posted 2001-03-16 11:25 AM


Now, what wend though MY head while readig this:

Geez Val, everytime I hear about it, you're unhappy about the situation with him for some reason or another. So just talk to him about it, just directly ask him about it, and if he avoids it, then drop him, there are people who will treat you like gold, because you deserve it.

Good luck and be happy Val

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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6 posted 2001-03-16 02:51 PM


Hey,

This is a great poem kinda sad I hope everything works out you have to tell me cause I hate bad endings

-- Linc

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7 posted 2001-03-20 07:41 PM


I swear I've read this already
Oh well......
Sorry to hear you're going thru this Sara
You need to tell him exactly what you feel
and if he really cares, he will give you what you deserve

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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8 posted 2001-03-22 04:01 PM


You deserve to feel and be told your special. I am shur that he really does care about you but i think sometimes its hard for guys to show it. Very nice poem!
~sugarpie313~
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9 posted 2001-03-22 05:25 PM


this isn't sara acire. this is valerie. thanks for all the replies. i am not with this guy anymore so all is good.

valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

luvnkris
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10 posted 2001-03-22 09:23 PM



i liked the poem heaps!
but maybe if he doesn't appreciate you its 4 the best that ur not with him anymore!
you'll find sum1 gr8 who will appreciate you 4 sure!
Luv Jo
xoxo

* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



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