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Fading Away
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0 posted 03-14-2001 11:42 AM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Fading Away

Your words dominate my thoughts,
And your face dominates my mind.
This past weekend was quite possibly
The best ever,
And quite possibly,
The worst.

I don't know how much longer I can go
Without seeing you,
And it's only been two days
Since I have been able
To look deep into your eyes,
And touch your face.
I yearn to feel the safety of
Your arms around me once more,
And I yearn to hear your sweet voice
Whispering beautiful words in my ear.

I miss you more than words can say,
And I find myself counting down the hours
Until I will see you again.
Is it so wrong to feel so strongly for you?
I just met you days ago,
But those days feel like a lifetime,
How can one person make such an impact,
On such a painstricken soul?

You have done more for me than you will ever know.
You have opened my eyes a little more,
And you have helped me see myself,
And the path I need to be traveling
A little more clearly.
I will be forever grateful
For all you have done in my life.

Until then,
I will continue counting down the hours
Until I see you once more.

--Marie

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-14-2001).]
© Copyright 2001 Jennifer Floyd - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 03-14-2001 11:44 AM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Very wonderful poem, Marie! I liked the summary at the end especially.
And I'll talk to you later!
Welcome to Passions. You are going to love it here!
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Tears of Glass
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Physically? VA.... Mentally? I


2 posted 03-14-2001 11:45 AM       View Profile for Tears of Glass   Email Tears of Glass   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tears of Glass

Welcome to passions Great poem

[This message has been edited by Tears of Glass (edited 03-14-2001).]
Linc
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3 posted 03-14-2001 11:57 AM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey Marie,

Welcome to passions I am sure you will love being here its great. This poem was a superb first post. I hope to see more of your excellent poetry this poem and you are going directaly in to my library until your next great piece.

-- Linc

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4 posted 03-14-2001 02:32 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I liked it. I thought you did well for the first post. Welcome to passions! I hope you enjoy your stay here and just as a regular thing I do.....I urge you to go check out TEEN EXPLORER......there's cake and S&V chips there.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
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5 posted 03-14-2001 03:40 PM       View Profile for DancinQueen   Email DancinQueen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DancinQueen

    
WELCOME!!!
    

Hey there   Great first post. I hope you enjoy it here at the Teen forum. I can't wait to read more of your work!

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤
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6 posted 03-14-2001 05:45 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

WaaaHOOO!!!!! Another one, guys. I really liked this. Verynice. Verynice indeedy. I'm patiently awaiting the next post.
~Carly


"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake."
- Leonardo da Vinci
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7 posted 03-14-2001 06:01 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Cute, Javier. Trying to get me there too?
grey::tears
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8 posted 03-14-2001 07:12 PM       View Profile for grey::tears   Email grey::tears   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for grey::tears

hey, great first poem, Marie, and welcome to passions.

~alex

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"Never fear something, just because you don't understand."
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9 posted 03-15-2001 06:33 AM       View Profile for Elvenblood   Email Elvenblood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elvenblood

Hey! Welcome and all that onderful stuff...

Great poem!!! I love it, and it's going into my library!! Thank you for sharing it, and I hope to read more soon!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK
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10 posted 03-15-2001 09:09 PM       View Profile for Poet on Acid   Email Poet on Acid   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet on Acid

Wow, I can't honestly say that form wise that was the best I've ever seen but I'm personally more concerned with the meanings behind stuff and that was a very powerful piece. And the form wasn't really all that bad but with a little practice I can plainly see you have the ability to do better.

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs


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First off...WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! I really hope that you like it here just as much as the rest of us do. You are a very talented poet and i cant wait to read more of your work so please, keep them coming!!
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12 posted 03-23-2001 06:57 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Sorry it took me this long to read your poem
I'll tell you what, you have really suttle way of expressing yourself
This piece would make others melt

Thanks for decidng to join our family here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you enjoy your stay. pls check your email

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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13 posted 03-28-2001 09:59 PM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

GOD I LOVE THIS POEM

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Linc
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14 posted 04-08-2001 09:55 AM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

    I don't care what anyone says because I LOVE THIS POEM

       -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

banburycross
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15 posted 04-09-2001 12:59 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

Your writing is so beautiful baby, i wish i had your talent.  this is one of the first poems you ever read to me and it is still one of my favorites.  i'm with linc, i love this poem.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

anonymousfemale
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16 posted 12-11-2001 09:48 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

WELCOME!! LOL  

Looking through your posts is always a gratifying experience. I do like this Marie. It shows you ALWAYS had talent and how far you have come as a writer now.

"How can one person make such an impact,
On such a painstricken soul?"

ugh, I ask myself that every single bloody day. Thanks for posting this. Much enjoyed.  

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

 
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