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I dont want a prince
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I dont want a prince |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
I was waiting for prince charming Waiting For a white stallion and Roses I found him But Prince Charming is nothing But a sweet talker Who is truly a prince of lies I guess i do not want a prince Who allways expects me to act like a princess I want someone to love me for who i am, not what i can do for his image. Is he out there? |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Yes... good poem by the way "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh... this got to me. I feel like it was directed at me for personal reasons. Good job... If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Silver Butterfly Junior Member
since 2001-03-13
Posts 42Between here and the end |
Not bad... not bad... it's good that you got away from rhyme ( i know I always focus on that). It might possibly just be me, but there's a few things that sound a little forced. Talk to me later about it. Ciao. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm right here!! -----------> ME <----------- Prince Charming Nice poem....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
THANX DOPEY, ILL CONSIDER THAT ;-). ALLAN I DONT UNDERSTAND WHAT U MEAN...IM ME ABOUT THAT...THANX EVENBLOOD AND SILVER BUTTERFLY, YALL ARE SO SWEET |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
There is nothing wrong with expecting a prince, hold your head up high and your standards and he will not only ride up on a white horse, he'll teach YOU how to ride and you'll love him forever Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I like your attitude Don't let them change you You're on the right direction Don't listen to Allan and Dopey too They're both sweet talkers i heard  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
It seems quite contradictory because what you want is someone who you have idolised but then you go on to say that you don't want him to idolise you... which is kinda unfair but it's probably just me who thinks that... It was however a great piece and I loved the flow. Zu Love is a friendship caught on fire. [This message has been edited by Marshalzu (edited 03-17-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I agree with Marshalzu. This poem is pretty contradictory. Well, nice job anyways. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I think it's kewl, I know what you mean it's like someone you idolize turns out to be just like a human being or something like that and turns out to be a real jerk:P but there are prince charmings out there somewhere..hehe someday he'll come for you and for me and for all those princess' at heart... "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I ONLY WISH YOU LUCK IN YOUR SEARCH TO FIND HIM! CUTE POEM, AND YES I THINK HE'S OUT THERE FOR YA!  ~*~JESILYN~*~"Tell me why you cry" |
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