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Angel, Pandora, Nina, Judith.... |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
So much portrayed on walls and canvases on papers in journals, yet I don't know what I'm looking at I can't see the eyes that guided the paint brush that willed the pen I can't see myself beyond the skin beyond the pride beyond the tears beyond the silence beyond the laughs I don't know who I am and in the end we still pretend the time we spend not knowing when we're finally free and you could be -NIN "The Wretched" Angel of Darkness |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Wow, that sucks....I'm sorry I don't knwow aht to say, but I hope you're ok. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well I disagree with Bryan. I thought this poem was quite good.  The whole stretch of "beyond the"s was neat. Very unique. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I couldn't help but laugh at how direct Elven was hahahaha.....God.... Well anyway he did display concern with hoping yer ok.... ANYWAY!!!!!!!!!!! I liked it.......I thought it was good. You and yer free verse style.....just free flowing as the words come....I liked the ending to. I know how you feel.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
LOL@Bryan This poem posseses so much meaning and power within it... It is truly amazing. As for not knowing who you are...That is a tuff situation to be in or get out of. I know from personal experience. All I can say is look in the mirror and dont wonder who you are..but why you are here. Think of all of the things you have done for and to people. Think of your family what you have gone through. Your dreams, goals, and achievments. And you never know.. you may find yourself along the way. ~Amanda~ Things will get better just be happy with what has come your way today, and keep living for what may come the next.~ By Amanda inspired by Brian |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I don't think he said the poem sucked guys I think he means the situation does.... I know it can easily be misunderstood  very passionate poem Dark I hope things do get better hang in there and stay strong "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a really deep poem. I liked it a lot.. holds a lot emotion. I hope things do get better for you, but until then, keep your chin up. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hang in there Dark. One day you'll know who you are and it may even be sooner than you think. I really like this piece. Probably because I can connect with it so easily. Your pieces are quite addictive which is a bloody good thing.  Keep writing and presenting work like this to us. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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shortilove_03 Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 20Arkansas, United States |
I thought it was quite good. With only a few words, you can express a whole universe of feelings. Keep up the good work Dark. |
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