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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-03-13 03:59 PM


I didn't think I could cry for you,
I thought there was nothing wrong,
but when I found out what happened,
I cried all day long.
Some people use that as an understatment,
but I know how long I've wept,
and I'm not keeping count anymore,
it's all the secrets I have kept.
It was too horible,
and to hard to let go,
i just wish I had called you,
and you'd forgiven me, ya know.
But I cry out those tears now,
and I cry them for you to see,
because we need some justice,
to slow down the misery.
Every year I'm here,
I'll put flowers on your grave,
and I swear on my life,
I'll get Alex to behave.
You can live through me,
and keep going while I grow,
because we can share one body,
and they'll never ever know.
I'd rather it've been me,
who'd have been the one to die,
so that I wouldn't have to sit here,
and forever wonder why.
But I don't know what I'm saying,
it's just been one of those days,
when I try to keep on going,
but I can't think of what to say.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.

Life is what happens when you're making ot

© Copyright 2001 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
DancinQueen
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1 posted 2001-03-13 04:03 PM


AWESOME! This has got to be my favorite of yours so far. very good ...it all fit together perfectly. great job on this one

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Allysa
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2 posted 2001-03-13 04:04 PM


thanks dq, that means a lot to me. I just tried to let it all flow out, or something. I have a headache now though, and I smell like pine.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.

Life is what happens when you're making ot

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3 posted 2001-03-13 07:08 PM


nicely said Allysa, I really liked this poem.
Quite sad though. *hugs*


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4 posted 2001-03-16 07:41 PM


Are you ok Allysa?
I know it's hard to lose someone
hang in there
be strong

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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5 posted 2001-03-16 07:49 PM


I'm with Kiley. This poem ROCKS and is instantly into my library.
I certainly hope that you are okay. Hurry up and get one of those wacky programs we are talking about in your other thread so we can talk!
Keep your head high. See you around, love.
~Allan


If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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6 posted 2001-03-16 07:54 PM


This poem is VERY good.. I'm sorry I missed it before. I like it a lot.. it's going into my library! Nicely written.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-16-2001).]

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7 posted 2001-03-16 07:55 PM


Oops.. I forgot to click add to my library.. good job again.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-16-2001).]

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8 posted 2001-03-16 08:42 PM


This was really well written... I'm usually too impatient to read long poems, but this kept me reading. I'm sorry for your loss. This poem sounds like you two were at odds when you lost them, is that it? Regret is a terrible emotion, don't let it eat at you forever. Best of luck.

Jenn


"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



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9 posted 2001-03-16 09:42 PM


Hey,

This is a great poem, it was sad. I wish I could say I enjoyed reading it but I can't it was to said. I am looking forward to reading "Happy" poems from you until yor next great peom

-- Linc


"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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