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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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If you crumble a sheet of paper, so that it fits inside your fist, when you uncrumble it, will it be whole again, unable to be missed? If you let yourself wither away, till your to wrinkled to walk, does that justify your right, to move and think, and talk? If you wrinkle something dear to you, like an orange carnation, or a letter, will it crumble into dirt, become nothingness, or float like a feather? If you let the truth, wither away into the lies, what is there to keep you from, what they say, what they feel, what they despise? If you let go now, of the memory of them, and they wrinkle and twist, and age and bend, Will they still be your true friend? I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. Life is what happens when you're making ot |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It is against the guidelines to post more than 3 threads in one day. Thank you. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"If you let the truth, wither away into the lies, what is there to keep you from, what they say, what they feel, what they despise?" beautiful thoughts Allysa..... next time don't post more than 3 in a day ok  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a beautiful poem! Your thoughts are very well-tought-out, if that makes any sense. And, just as acire said, stay away from posting more than 3 in one day. That way people can post what they think about your poetry. But nice job on the poem --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
BEAUTIFUL SENTIMENTS HERE! I LIKE YOUR WORK...IT FLOWS WONDERFULLY. BEST WISHES...~*~JESILYN~*~ "Tell me why you cry" |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Yeah, there's not much left to say, but I want to say it's incredibly bautiful, and thank you for posting it :-) "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this is wicked good! i love it... i like the rhythm and rhyming method. i hope to see more like this!!  ~VALERIE~ *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Okay, this simply rules. I am in LOVE with the format of it, Allysa. And the message is also great. But for the sake of the FORMAT, this earns a seat in my library. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks everyone! I'm glad you like it. I didn't mean to post four poems. But I've seen people do it before, so I didn't think much of it. Allan, thanks for making me smile. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
when it's someone new, we let it go and email them explaining the guidelines. You, you should know better Allysa...bad girl, very bad girl "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Ahh, yes, the life of a disobediant person such as myself, I may have skimmed over the guidelines, but I FORGOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! So forget about it!!!!! I have to say I like this poem very much! Even though I wrote it myself. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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