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shadowmere
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0 posted 2001-03-12 08:38 PM


Was sitting here doing homework and came up with this little number in the margins...

I Love You....a term so loosely used
yet whenever used is music to the ears
a cheapened form of it can be bought...sold
it even comes in disposables
Its use has become as common as hello
What ever happened to the
love sonnets of Shakespear?
Or the evere so graceful sheppard
of Marlowe...with Raleigh's nymph?
Gone are the days of chivalry and grace
replaced by a yearning for labels...and public grace
I too am guilty of this crime...I call
upon the world to be above me
You mustn't hold hate in
your heart...nor love untruly..
for if you do...you suffer the same fate either way.

Sorry if it seems broken up and non flowing...kind of ramblings


Can it be so that you’ve been so ignorant or am I just another soul, in loves mad torrent?

© Copyright 2001 James M. Gill - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-03-12 08:48 PM


Ramblings are good. Quite good.
I actually enjoyed this though...
fix the spelling of "Shakespeare."
See you around.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


shadowmere
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2 posted 2001-03-12 08:51 PM


my bad...lol
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3 posted 2001-03-13 06:54 PM


Great job on this one. I thought the message of the poem was great. Kill off false love!
Death to fake feeling!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Elvenblood
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4 posted 2001-03-13 07:30 PM


Wow, I love tis poem!! It makes me proud to be chivalrous! lol

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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5 posted 2001-03-16 07:25 PM


BRAVO my friend
~*stands up and applauds*~
BRAVO

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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6 posted 2001-03-16 07:59 PM


I really like this poem. It's so true. Those 3 words are used so often and not even in the right way anymore. Nicely done

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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7 posted 2001-03-16 08:38 PM


Chivalry needs to come back, darn it! Guys need to put their coats over puddles again... and open doors for women, (even if they don't know them)... I'm no subservient (spell?) girl, I can hold my own... but every once in a while, I want to be taken care of...offer to pay for stuff!!! LOL Nice poem... and I also agree that love is too loosely used, love is such a strong, important emotion, use the term wisely!!

Jenn


"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



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8 posted 2001-03-16 09:51 PM


Hey,

On the guys behalf (the "nice guy's" behalf that is) chivalry has never left. Some guys known as jerks have taken over and for some reason the "nice guys" have been given the boot so to speak. Back to the poem it was great and your right I love you is used to often when its not ment to get what one wants. Anyway great job hope to see more like it until then

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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