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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Today I learned that poetry is more than words, and peace isn't impossible; no where near hopeless. Today I learned that laughter dissolves shame and fear, and all artists have a little speck of Crazy in their blood. Today I learned that real friendships aren't meant to make you curse yourself, and safety pins are for holding things together, not tearing them apart. Today I learned that forgiveness is beautiful, and to be forgiven is to taste the chocolate in Heaven. Today I learned that raindrops are candy, and senior citizens dance better than most teenagers. Today I learned that children are easier to love than to hate, and baby-sitting shouldn't include the word "payment". Today I learned that sprinklers are magical, and subdivisions aren't always the killer of fantasy forests. Today I learned that the crimson of sunset loves to kiss the blue of night, and no matter how loud the world gets, there's always closets. Today I learned that never may mean tomorrow, and tomorrow may be your last shot at forever. "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 03-12-2001).] |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
wow...i really liked this...i especially liked the "never may mean tomorrow and tomorrow may be the last chance you get" its like the line of my life rite now...good job!~ETHEL~ |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey Carly, I already told you this was pretty cool! For some reason thought, poems have less effect on me over icq than on the mesage board :-( oh well, either way, ttyl!! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
As I told you earlier, Carly, this piece is wonderful. It is completely different from what I am used to seeing you do but it is very well done. one of the few poems I wouldn't taint with a format. Great job, love.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
 We all replied at the same time... If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
That should go down in PIP history!!!!! WOAH!!!!!!!!! Anyway wow carly! This poem was awesome. i thought it rocked!!! So many lines of pure truth within the poem. I loved it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i loved it Carly. i really did. it was a change from your usual poetry, and i liked it. keep writting  San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
yeah, keep ~WRITING~ too.  |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
These words are so true...I agree with all of them practically. Well done Carly. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Awww....thanks guys... And the day I stop writting is the day I stop living...~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 03-15-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"Today I learned that the crimson of sunset loves to kiss the blue of night" Need I say more You have a wonderful way with words "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. wonderful poem. I really like this. I agree with everyone, keep writing! --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh I love, I LOVE, I LOVE!! This is going directly to the library, Carly. Haha..I also love your Constructive Critiques Message. Very funny. This is incorrect though : "Today I learned that children are easier to love than to hate, and baby-sitting shouldn't include the word "payment"." Kids suck and therefore ALWAYS require payment.  Keep it up, Carly. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This cetainly belongs in pip history dopes This was a tremendous poem I found it very insperational Thanks for telling me to go read this Carly I really loved it Jason |
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JustBNMe New Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 3 |
That was a beautiful poem. Its mix of seriousness and humor was great. Very touching. Definetly library material!! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
AWESOME! I almost missed this one. I'm glad I didn't. This was such a great poem. The last two lines are the best, although it is hard to say something stands out more than the rest in this one.Right into the library. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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