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Ricky Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 28West Virginia, USA 
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I am pushed away once again I thought I finally found someone Believe me when I tell you this girl is a perfect ten My love for her weighs more than 2000 ton _____, why can't you see this I try so hard to fix the wrong All my complaning is about how much it is you I miss But I guess you're right, what is done is done But please even though you don't want me _____, please remember this Even though it's hard to see It is you that I will miss _____, I love you with all of my heart and so much more. The spaces are the girl's name. I cannot say her name on here. I don't think she'd like it too much. They are NOT curse words or profanities. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I know who goes in the space.  Good job, Ricky. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK guys I admit it........Ricky I wouldn't have been mad if you put MY name in there.  It's me guys.......I'm the girl he loves..... Anyway nicely done ricky....very sweet  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Ricky-----I'm truly sorry, But think about it: "If" we were to hook back up again, and we end up breaking up again, do you really want to go thru all the crap we did, just to become friends again...Remember all those fights, and names we called each other? That's something I don't want to go thru again, I love just being your friend. You will always hold a special place in my heart, you know that, I know that, every guy I've dated since you knows that. Whenever I'm upset about anything, you're (almost) always the first one by my side. I don't know what I would have done if the phone hadn't rang the night that Irvin broke up with me...Ricky...I love you, but I don't want to jeopardize our friendship again. Think about it: It took us ove a year to get the to the point that we could be in the same room togehter without tearing each other's head off...I'll always be your friend, that can't, won't and will never change. Friends Forever i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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Ricky Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 28West Virginia, USA |
Tamma - who said this was about you? |
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shadowmere Junior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 11Ohio, USA |
ouch...speaking of rejection...that was a little harsh. Aside from that, nicely written work. Keep it up! |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Ouch, Ricky.. that was a shut-down! Very good poem, I really liked it. Whoever it is to must be very lucky! *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey Ricky, Good job on this poem, I think it expresses the feeling well. "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." BothUnknown |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
I dont know if I should cry because its over, or smile because it happened [This message has been edited by Tamma (edited 03-12-2001).] |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oh man Tamma... that just sucked now didn't it... ricky that was mean...! The poem was good tho... hope you get what you want. Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Oh..well..wow..um...nice poem...but I'm gonna step outta the line of fire- I have enough to worry about myself w/o interfering... Bel |
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Ricky Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 28West Virginia, USA |
Tamma - Is that supposed to hurt me? The only person it's hurting is you. I've known him a lot longer than you and believe me.... if you only knew half of what I know.... Also, to everyone else - What's so harsh? This poem was about my ex-g/f Stephanie. So there, fill in all the lines with Stephanie. |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Ricky...It was a joke...Stub is only a friend...plus I don't care anymore...IS IT JUNE YET?????? i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Is Stephanie a member of passions too? You could've written down her name I don't see why not She would've loved it "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Okay....all I am going to say is nice poem and run before a fight begins  to you two not that its my bizz cause its not but...you should get along "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
First I want you to know I respect both Tamma and Ricky here. I'm not going to take a side, because that's not what I;m all about. The point is, I don't think the boards are a place to argue about whatever the heck's the problem. That's my two cents, like it or not, I don't want to see two people, not anyone, bickering on a reply board. I'm surprised the moderators don't comment on it. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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