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shadowmere
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since 2001-03-10
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Ohio, USA

0 posted 2001-03-11 07:48 PM


I found this poem in my notes that I wrote a long time ago. I could hardly believe it was my own words. I hope you enjoy.

Fallen In Love With a Concept

Winter’s moon is on the rise
Set to end on its highest prize
The cold sky’s demeanor is all the same
Coldness, heartache, fallen fame.
These are the thoughts of the cold-hearted mind
Why look deeper, you know what you’ll find
An empty heart to an empty soul
Gone from its mind any hope of being whole.

A concept is what you love and desire
You who says hearts can burn with love’s fire
However when the concept is fully revealed
The fire is void, and anger you feel
Stop and think about what has been said
Is this the truth that you hate and dread
Can it be so that you’ve been so ignorant
Or am I just another soul, in loves mad torrent


© Copyright 2001 James M. Gill - All Rights Reserved
Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17
Posts 409
Maine, USA
1 posted 2001-03-11 08:59 PM


Oh hey welcome to passions! I'ms ure you'll love it here I know I did! anyway, this is great! I don't particularly love Sonnet type things, but that's ok, because this is a great work. Keep writing, if you have other formats you use, I'd love to see them!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Alwye
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In the space between moments
2 posted 2001-03-11 09:38 PM


Wonderful piece of writing! Welcome to Passions, I sure hope you enjoy your stay with us! Make yourself at home, make sure to read our guidelines, and keep posting!

P.S. Check your mail for a special welcome.


*Krista Knutson*

"Can't run fast enough
Can't hide I can't fly
I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2001-03-11 10:05 PM


NIcely done here! Welcome to passions!
I think you've done quite well on your first post and encourage you to post more.
I'll also recomend that you go check out the TEEN EXPLORER....they have cake.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

DancinQueen
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4 posted 2001-03-11 10:49 PM


Welcome!!!  

AWESOME! I loved this. straight to my library   I can't wait to read more of your work, keep it up!

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Allan Riverwood
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5 posted 2001-03-11 11:59 PM


Ooh... this is incredible! I love going back and reading stuff from my past. I was such a clever little poet.
And so were you. Welcome to Passions.
Let's see how your recent work is.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA
6 posted 2001-03-12 12:18 PM


Welcome to passions.
Great first post. I hope to see more from you.

Steph

katherine
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 365
Canberra Australia
7 posted 2001-03-12 02:01 AM


this is absolutly awesome!! wow!
keep it up
~katie~

Tears of Glass
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since 2000-12-04
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8 posted 2001-03-12 05:21 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS

I loved this... Great job. I hope you like it here at Passions!

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

Acies
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9 posted 2001-03-15 05:55 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

I'm very impressed with your fisrt post
you'll fit right in
can't wait to see more
keep posting

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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