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ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06
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SC, USA

0 posted 2001-03-11 05:46 PM


~hey u guys hope this is aight and doesnt suck too bad ~

I wish…
I wish for a lot of things
Though they never come true
I wish for too many things
I wish I knew
I shouldn’t wish
Wishes never come true
Never say never
But you never knew
You didn’t see what I saw
And you didn’t even care
You had time for everyone else
But me, you could never bare
I brought back too many memories
Or so you said
I wish on a star
And pray beside my bed
That you will notice
And make a little time for me
I have something to say
And then I would let you be
But I see you in school
And you walk by without even a glance
I can’t bare this any longer
Please give me a chance
But I know you,
You’ll let me stay blue
Still, sometimes I wish
But wishes never come true



"i remember running through the wet grass
falling a step behind
both of us never tiring
desperatly wanting"
~better than ezra...desperatly wanting

© Copyright 2001 ethel lahootie - All Rights Reserved
Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
1 posted 2001-03-11 06:02 PM


Wow...this was just an awesome poem! I like the repetition of the "wishes never come true" line. Sadly, I can relate to this.
A very powerful read.
~K~

~*Won't you come and hold my hand?
This world has taken me as far as it can...
without your smile.~*

~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong,

ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06
Posts 143
SC, USA
2 posted 2001-03-11 07:24 PM


thanks for replying...unfortunately too many ppl can relate!! thanks for taking the time ~etheL~

"i remember running through the wet grass
falling a step behind
both of us never tiring
desperatly wanting"
~better than ezra...desperatly wanting

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

3 posted 2001-03-11 07:26 PM


Dang chica!! u r quite the poet . Are any of these really based on ur life? Good job!

Bel

ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06
Posts 143
SC, USA
4 posted 2001-03-11 07:33 PM


hey kT um naw these arent based on life thingys they just come out of my head i think...hard to imagine huh? haha! thanks for reading! i luv craigs to u!!! its so sweet!~ethel~

"i remember running through the wet grass
falling a step behind
both of us never tiring
desperatly wanting"
~better than ezra...desperatly wanting

Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30
Posts 176
Virginia
5 posted 2001-03-11 09:40 PM


This was a cute poem. keep writing. :o)
-angel bee-

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-03-12 01:59 AM


Not hard to imagine.
I liked it... very nice take on the concept of wishes.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2001-03-12 02:14 PM


Great job here. I liked the style of the poem.....the ryhme scheme was quite well done. I thought this had a bit of a punch in it since it was very diff. from what I'm used to reading on here.
I liked it.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06
Posts 143
SC, USA
8 posted 2001-03-12 03:55 PM


thanks for taking the time to read it! yeah i always end up making a statement to be different...haha
~ETHEL~


"i remember running through the wet grass
falling a step behind
both of us never tiring
desperatly wanting"
~better than ezra...desperatly wanting

Acies
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Twilight Zone
9 posted 2001-03-15 12:10 PM


wishes do come true ethel
the thing is you have to make it come true
it means, you have to work on it too
you can't just wish and let it be
now, wish and it'll come true

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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