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Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell

0 posted 2001-03-11 05:31 PM


Been away for a REALLY long time...looking forward to catching up on the reading and with new and old members
Here's my latest...


Justification

We are admittedly the youth of the universe
Why so many questions
Do we have something to prove
..to you?
How many times have we
Heard this all before?
How can we be in love
How can we be mature
How can our thoughts
our creations, our words
have any depth
we're too young to comprehend
too ignorant to understand
too irrational, too emotional to be legitimate
too inexperienced to be as enlightened
as...you?
Do you have it all figured out?
Are you the standard that we must live up to?
Here's the million dollar question:
How will we ever be much of anything
With you looking over our shoulders?
If we said we love because we never could have learned in a thousand lifetimes what they have taught us...
if we told you that maturity is relative to the advancement of your values and not the number of years you've walked the earth...
if we claimed that our thoughts were as priceless as any genius you could produce...
would you then understand?
would you get it, would you be satisfied?
...would you laugh?
Why so many questions?
Will we ever be able to...
should we even feel the need to justify ourselves
so that we may be considered equal...
to you?
We are proudly the youth of the universe-
"We have no more to prove than you do
...just more time to prove it."

***writer's note: As much as it pains me to admit it, I cannot take credit for the last two lines of this poem, which also happen to be the 2 BEST lines...all credit for the amazing wisdom in the poems's closing goes to Zac (I am so jealous...)***



~*Won't you come and hold my hand?
This world has taken me as far as it can...
without your smile.~*

~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong,




[This message has been edited by Kandi (edited 03-12-2001).]

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ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06
Posts 143
SC, USA
1 posted 2001-03-11 05:49 PM


wow i really really liked this! it seems so tru...i really liked it! haha. good job! ~ethel~

"i remember running through the wet grass
falling a step behind
both of us never tiring
desperatly wanting"
~better than ezra...desperatly wanting

Acies
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Member Rara Avis
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Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
2 posted 2001-03-11 09:56 PM


Hey, it's nice to see you again
What have you been up to
I'm glad you've decided to join us again
welcome back
your poem is very opinionatedly strong
i don't blame you for saying these things
what you said is very true
thanks for sharing


"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA
3 posted 2001-03-12 12:36 PM


Wow..I loved it. So much truth in this.
Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
4 posted 2001-03-12 02:09 PM


Nicely done here. I really liked this read. I thought it was pretty great.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

shadowmere
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since 2001-03-10
Posts 11
Ohio, USA
5 posted 2001-03-12 05:08 PM


Very well written indeed! Some of the older generation might take offense, but I thinks thats exactly what this poem is saying...why should they?

Can it be so that you’ve been so ignorant or am I just another soul, in loves mad torrent?

Allan Riverwood
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Posts 3502
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6 posted 2001-03-12 06:56 PM


Yes! It's about time someone poeticized this age-old problem about the not-so-age-old individuals in society.
Power to the youth!
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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