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0 posted 2001-03-11 04:43 PM


Letter of hate.

Letters to a maiden,
i'm a damsel in distress
my fear is overidden
my tears are just suppressed,
I'm living in a dream
and she's the only thing that's real
i'm being torn at the seam
demons snapping at my heel
shes destroying my whole world
and i'm loving every bit
the dark banners are unfurled
and the braziers are lit
shes lighting up the dark
that is mean't to be my life
she's left me with a mark
and it's replacing all my strife
i'm waiting for the silence
to deafen all their ears
I'm looking to the violence
to brings their eyes to tears
their gonna pay for me
and I'm gonna make them pay
and when I set them free
there gonna want to stay
hate me or love me
that's their only choice
die or they can follow me
and i'll be their single voice.



© Copyright 2001 Andrew Sewell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-11 10:02 PM


I thought this was great. I liked this a lot and think you are a great writer.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-03-12 01:55 AM


I will agree... I see a similarity in the titles of two of your posts here. Letters? Some sort of series? Very interesting.
And this was magnificent, as always, Marshal. Keep posting for us.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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3 posted 2001-03-14 08:55 PM


I like your style of short lines
It gives the poem it's own personality
thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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