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Raven Skye
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0 posted 2001-03-11 10:53 AM


Once again, not my best work....wrote this yesterday...hehe by the title you thought it was gonna be something good haha

Ravished Entity

I was bleeding for love
for the whole world to see.
I did find someone,
he was in love with me.

I walked so blindly
for so many years.
I stopped him short,
Had so many fears.

He took advantage.
My soul now sore.
He threw me away.
My feelings he tore.

Dying slowly inside,
I'm about to break.
Why does this have to be?
I feel like such a fake.

Why doesn't he understand?
He's hurting me so deep...
Until he is silenced,
I will never get to sleep...


*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
"Can't explain the way that I feel. You are the love I never found." -Cold

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Linc
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1 posted 2001-03-11 11:20 AM


Hey,

This is good but I have not read much of your work so I don't know what your good is if its better than then great. I look forward to reading your work. deep I think its great. Laters

-- Linc

"The goal is not always the the reason something is done the path to get to the goal is more important."

[This message has been edited by Linc (edited 03-11-2001).]

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-03-11 12:07 PM


I actually thought this was great. I played my guitar to the poem and it sounds great in lyric form. Anyway, nicely done.
I liked it.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

grey::tears
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Posts 19
lost within my mind
3 posted 2001-03-11 01:44 PM


hey,
I really liked this poem. i thought it was exceptionally written, and full of emotion. keep it up, i cant wait to read more.

A.K.S.
"Never fear something, just because you don't understand."

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Twilight Zone
4 posted 2001-03-13 10:01 AM


you wrote your deepest feelings down real well. I hope things get better for you. Keep writing cause it does help rid of the pain thanks for sharing. lokking forward to reading more of your work

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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