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coalesce
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 9
canada

0 posted 2001-03-10 09:30 PM


rape me with the simplest of lies once more
you act as if you care
you never did
i put it all and more on the line for you
i lost it all
you left me shattered
it's been months
so why give you the satisfaction of knowing
that you still have my heart
and i can't take it back
so now i'm older and confused
when a month has aged me a thousand years
i've taken a feeling and stretched it twice the size
all i can keep is the thought
to know that i'm happier
drownding in my own hate
then knowing that you have someone
leave me ignorant

© Copyright 2001 fred feather - All Rights Reserved
CLBinLOVE
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA
1 posted 2001-03-10 09:50 PM


strong, really strong, i like it
kinda touches on that love hate relationships
ya know? i dknt know maybe im jus tired
but it sounded good :-)

let the fighting words lie
let the candle light die
let the sun come up
let the same imply
~EvE 6


Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2001-03-10 10:41 PM


Dude, wowish! I know exactly what you are talking about here!! I sooooo connect with this poem. You did VERY well in writing it. Impressed....


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2001-03-11 02:33 PM


I also sense the strong words in your poem, great job of expressing your feelings.

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
"Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it."
BothUnknown

grey::tears
Junior Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 19
lost within my mind
4 posted 2001-03-11 02:36 PM


this was a very strong and emotional poem. i liked it alot. keep it up...

A.K.S.
"Never fear something, just because you don't understand."

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
5 posted 2001-03-11 07:09 PM


WoWish is right (to quote Dopey...)
Awesome poem, and a great title to go with it. I was so feeling this poem. Kudos to you, and keep the poems coming. Great job!

"Don't spoons just make you smile? My friend is more of a FORK person, the butterknife makes me cry..." -Hallucinations in Blond

Acies
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Twilight Zone
6 posted 2001-03-13 10:13 AM


Wow Wow Wow
That was really good my friend
I'm very impressed
~*stands up and applauds*~

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17
Posts 409
Maine, USA
7 posted 2001-03-13 12:02 PM


Oh my, why I didn't reply sooner, I don't know, but I'm glad i do now! This is a wonderful work. I say the same stuff about all I reply to, but they are all brilliant, and ths is great, and evokes a response.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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