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katherine
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0 posted 2001-03-10 04:24 AM


I want you to be mine
I need you here with me
I hate it when you're gone
But i don't always want to be with you
I never want you to go

i hate the way you make me need you
I hate the way i know i need you
I hate what you did to her and the way
it effected me

Through all of this i need you to make me feel the way you do.

© Copyright 2001 Katie - All Rights Reserved
Elvenblood
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1 posted 2001-03-10 09:58 AM


Oh, I hope he, or someone, is always there for you! THis is also a really good piece! And its going into my library

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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2 posted 2001-03-10 05:14 PM


The best poetry always comes from the heart and I can tell you I felt as though I could hear you heart beating, Great stuff... Must be a very special person.
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3 posted 2001-03-10 05:16 PM


This must be a really special guy, great poem, love to see more of your work.


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4 posted 2001-03-10 10:23 PM


Me? you=me

Nice poem. Short, sweet, to the point. Nicely expressed.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-03-12 01:49 AM


*coughs at Javier*
Ignore him.
This poem was quite good. I see the emotions you displayed here, they are quite clear.
Great job.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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6 posted 2001-03-14 08:51 PM


You've shown your feelings clearly
And shown such strong emotions
great write
thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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