Drunken Girl (She'll Learn Tomorrow)

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Teen Poetry #4

Drunken Girl (She'll Learn Tomorrow)

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2001-03-09 05:52 PM

Waking to the world
I find myself
asking more than I recieve
And if I cry
the tears are washed away
by energies in glass bottles
But never gone for good
I come back and haunt myself

and in the end
we still pretend
the time we spend
not knowing when
we're finally free
and you could be
-NIN "The Wretched"

Angel of Darkness

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-03-09 06:23 PM

I liked it. Not as good as the other one, but I thought it was nicely done for what it was trying to portray.
You do work well with the short poems. I prefer short poems........I think they are a bit harder to write considering we're trying to cram in a lot of meaning into so little lines.
Good job on this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

2 posted 2001-03-09 08:42 PM

I really liked this, it makes you think..or then again, maybe it just makes me think. Don't worry, I miss things all the time

I like short poems, they can be much more powerful than long ones. Good job.

Bel

Angel in Flight
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

3 posted 2001-03-10 02:03 PM

For some odd reason this made me smile. It didnt really make me think though just made me laugh at myself.. sorry I haunt myself everytime I look in the mirror your poem just reminded me of it. Great job on this I liked it alot. Into the library you go.

The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-03-11 10:09 PM

Don't tell me that you're drinking now
I'm glad you know it doesn't solve the problem
And that it doesn't make it go away
If you need to talk to someone just email me ok?
hope things get better

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Wicced_Witch
Member

since 2000-02-06

Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA

5 posted 2001-03-12 12:31 PM

I really liked this one. Thats probably because it reminded me of myself this past year. Have to put this one in my library.

Steph

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