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Teen Poetry #4

I Was Once A Mermaid Who Ate Applesauce

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2001-03-09 05:40 PM

Listen to brilliant madness
streaming across the seas
Praising and mourning
the loss of the times
that never existed at all

and in the end
we still pretend
the time we spend
not knowing when
we're finally free
and you could be
-NIN "The Wretched"

Angel of Darkness

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-03-09 06:16 PM

Wow I liked this poem a lot.....and I can see the title was odd.....trying to up the Jell-o and Sex Dice title?
haha......this one was VERY interesting hahaha and it just proves how messed up you are!!! *quivers in fear*

Anyhow, nicely done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-03-09 06:18 PM

Yes, this is outstanding! Such a powerful message.
I'd expect no less from you.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

3 posted 2001-03-09 08:43 PM

This is really great. I like the title too....
Very nice

Bel

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

4 posted 2001-03-10 02:06 PM

WOW WOW WOW WOW !!! So meaningful and powerful as well. Great job on this I liked this a very lot.

The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2001-03-10 02:51 PM

Oooh the title..hahaha.

Now moving onto the poem. Short but sweet. Right to the point.

Nicely done.

~AF~

"To alcohol! The cause of - and solution to - all of life's problems!"
Homer Simpson

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-03-12 09:40 AM

You have an attention catching title
You poem is short but very meaningful
just straight to the point
wonderful write

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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