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A memory of Forgotten Dreams

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Acies
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0 posted 03-09-2001 05:02 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Acies

I haven't been able to write in a while.  Seems like my brain isn't working at all and at the same time it's been cramping. So I hope this most recent poem is not a failure.  With that thought, please be kind in judging.....


A Memory of Forgotten Dreams


Angelic voice thru silence of melancholy nights
Oh virgin silhouette floating on gentle breeze
A sight.....
Yes.....
a sight that in brilliance of skies lit blue
And pearls that shine.....
thus greet all with subtle delight

Reddened lips surrounded of passionís untold
Magnificent crownís lost in waves of seas
An essence...
aromatic wonder of redolent garden blossoms
What lustrous.....
timeless.....
flawless sheath of silk and gold

These are images carved on this, a loverís theme
Still cold to your touch of sweet caress
So again.....
I trance wistfully into this, a gentle slumber
For you my love.....
are nothing but.....
ďa memory of  forgotten dreamsĒ


"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.


[This message has been edited by acire (edited 07-27-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 acire - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-09-2001 05:06 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

*applauds*
This is my first time actually seeing your work. I pounced on the chance to reply to this, as soon as I saw it.
Truly excellent! I love your style of writing, or at least what is portrayed in here.
Wonderful use of pauses, the syntax in this piece was just marvelous.
Having not read anything of yours, I can't really put this up against anything as good or bad as far as your ability is concerned...
But after this reply, and a few more, I'm hitting the "find poems" button on you, man.
See you around.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

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2 posted 03-09-2001 06:19 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Nicely done acire. Another wonderful poem by you. I have read better, but this was just great.....on a scale of 1-10......you get an 8.......yes.....an 8!!!!! Haha....great job on it.



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3 posted 03-09-2001 06:36 PM       View Profile for Isabelle   Email Isabelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabelle

This is the first time i've been privilaged to read your poetry. You have done a wonderful job just keep it up and hope to read more.

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4 posted 03-09-2001 07:00 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

......Holy smokes. Yeah. I really, really liked this. I think the fact that i'm listening to Final Fantasy (World of Ruin) music added to the experience....but man oh man.....library time.....
~Carly

"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake."
- Leonardo da Vinci
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5 posted 03-09-2001 07:06 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Hey!! World of Ruin from VI sounds like a GREAT idea for this poem! Thanks for the idea, Ca~rly!!
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort



[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-09-2001).]
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6 posted 03-09-2001 11:06 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I liked this one Acire...very powerful...and I was gentle so there!
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7 posted 03-10-2001 01:54 AM       View Profile for HiddenSparklez   Email HiddenSparklez   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HiddenSparklez

Wow, what a great poem! The first two lines had me hooked right away, "Angelic voice thru silence of melancholy nights
Oh virgin silhouette floating on gentle breeze". Full of imagery and it all flows into one powerful poem. Great job for sure!

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear
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"I trance wistfully into this, a gentle slumber
For you my love.....
are nothing but.....
ďa memory of forgotten dreamsĒ"

Oh my, Acire ... I really enjoyed this piece! What a lovely mood you set with these words, gentle, tranquil, peaceful ... such a wonderful flow. Very nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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9 posted 03-10-2001 12:08 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

Thanks for the kind words guys

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.
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10 posted 03-10-2001 01:07 PM       View Profile for DancinQueen   Email DancinQueen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DancinQueen

oh D~ wonderful poem. i almost missed it, too. Glad I didn't...pretty breath-taking actually. i cant even think of anything to say.. BUT when i read it i got that feeling of a cold breeze, ya know? lol i dont know why thats just what it made me think of. and i WONDER who this is about ??? hmm yes you haven't posted in awhile but thats alright...me either Then I do that whole rack my brain for a poem thing and it just never works out...i have to have an inspiration or something...but i just started something new yesterday, but it's going to take me awhile..imagine that, a poem take ME awhile to write..who would have thought? But neways im rambling..i need to talk to you, too..so dont go anywhere. great job babe

*dq


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11 posted 03-10-2001 02:27 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Wow Acire, this is remarkable!

Your opening lines paved the way for a truly magnificent poem. Like some of the others, I have not read any of your work...Or if I did, I can't remember. I am glad that I found this piece as it is something that should be treasured.

It's heading in the direction of the library Acire.

Very well done.

~AF~

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12 posted 03-10-2001 07:16 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

My friend, this is wonderful! I know what it's like to write after a long time, and it's a rare person who can produce something like this after a few months!! Wonderful free-form, my friend, and a topic we can all relate to. Thanks for sharing.



"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli
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13 posted 03-10-2001 11:06 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

I'ts great to read you, acire.

This is wonderfully serene and peaceful.

looking out for you


Maree


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I may know the truth but not face it
I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound
but turn my head indifferent.

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14 posted 03-11-2001 12:04 AM       View Profile for coalesce   Email coalesce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for coalesce

this was a wonderful poem and VERY well written. i enjoyed it very much, and am looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Wow!! Dang! *jumps up and down* that was great acire! Write more often aye? Good job muchacho

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thanks for the kind words everyone...thank you so much

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.
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17 posted 03-12-2001 08:54 PM       View Profile for Tamma   Email Tamma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamma

DAMN...I think I now know why you quit posting poems for so long...you were either practicing, or trying to get this one perfect

Love ya, acire!!!


i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened
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Wow....that was awesome!! Absolutely luv it!! Geez...I haven't been here in a long time!! Well I realyl iked this one, keep writing!!

Luv ALways,
~*~Priscilla~*~


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????

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Well then, my friend... You have a way of making this look easy... and you and I both know better than that... This is quite a lovely piece, indeed...
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So Sorry I'm late!!! I tried, but try as I may, I am never able to get outta bed on time!! oh wait...well nevermind, D, your work is so picturesque! My god, I've forgotten how truly beautiful it is. Your thoughts show your innerself and beauty...and I am very happy to be priveleged enough to get some insight to it. Thanks so much for sharing with us your heart! ~*~Jesilyn~*~

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21 posted 03-13-2001 04:44 PM       View Profile for TrueLUV   Email TrueLUV   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TrueLUV

Hands down this piece brought me closer to my own reality it was incredible. I am speechless and I dont express that much towards ones work, but I myself haven't written in awhile so I know how it feels GREAT POEM
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22 posted 03-14-2001 04:41 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

You are so awesome! And you know it too! (hugs acire tightly and picks him up and swirls in a circle.) Ya know you're awesome! This rocks!!

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.

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Down Allysa, Down!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
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24 posted 03-14-2001 08:32 PM       View Profile for Pixie-Babe03   Email Pixie-Babe03   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pixie-Babe03

This is great acire keep it up i'd love to see more of your work SOON *hint hint* wirte more!!


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