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coalesce
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0 posted 2001-03-08 08:16 PM


broken wings never to be mended
my loss of hope, will be the loss of your life
angels never lie, they stab you
through the back of your heart
never could be expected
to waste a life on promises
while there broken, your heart breaks the same
but your laughing
just one last tear, your open
exposed to the opposite of hate
love kills the heart while hate mends the scars
angels never lie, they kick the chair out from beneath
happiness falls hung, never to be found again
i'll blame you, forever, leaving me like this

© Copyright 2001 fred feather - All Rights Reserved
DancinQueen
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1 posted 2001-03-08 10:13 PM


Awesome! Powerful words..especially, "..love kills the heart and hate mends the scars.." sooo true. excellent job

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-03-09 09:55 AM


Ooh... this was a great poem. I loved the tone and mood it set.
Very good job.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


TearsOfPearls
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3 posted 2001-03-09 01:48 PM


I liked this one, well written...keep it up

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-03-09 05:59 PM


Wow hey I liked this. If only I read this a few months ago. I connected with this completely. Thanks for posting this awesome poem.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

lilpoet
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5 posted 2001-03-09 08:30 PM


WOW
This was a pretty cool and good poem. I enjoyed it. I wish I had talent like that. That is exactly the way i would feel if someone left me like that. Very good job.


~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

Isabel Galaxia
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6 posted 2001-03-09 08:33 PM


Wow this is amazing. Love the last line. Good job, thank you for posting it.
Bel

Angel in Flight
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7 posted 2001-03-10 02:00 PM


ohh...ohh....ohh.. And I thought I was the only one that felt this way. I cant say I know how you are feeling because I do not know your situation, but I can say I am here if you ever need anyone to talk to and I might be able to relate to your situation. Best of luck in the future and I hope everything turns out ok.

The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny

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8 posted 2001-03-11 09:40 PM


very strong words you've shared my friend
hope things do get better for you
keep writing, it does help
thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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