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starryeyed999 Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 35 |
I see you and my heart melts I feel you and my knees weaken I taste you and my insides tremble I know you'll never come back And just the thought of that Makes me not want to go on To shut it all out and never turn back. I must stay strong. I will not let on that I once loved you. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww this was really sad. but very good, you expressed your emotions very well in this piece. keep up the great work  *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This was very good. The format at the start... "when I do this, this happens"... was interesting. You did a great job. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
hey that was a gr8 poem - realli sweet! let the guy know how u feel ey! maybe something gr8 will come out of it! Luv Jo xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
that was cool straight from the heart, Yet to keep it a secret this love shall depart, I say go for it and if and don't work they have a screw loose Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
Your poem had a lot of meaning. I understand what you mean about not wanting to tell someone you love them for the fear that they will hurt you. *Me* *If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything* *A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
nicely done here. I thought you wrote wonderfully.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Beautiful piece. Nicely done here. You expressed yourself very well. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You do express yourself really well in your poems. I'm sorry that you are going thru sad times, and I hope things get better for ya. keep your head up, that's the way to do it  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Ohh.. this made me want to cry. This is so very sad and I truly hope everything will be ok soon, and if you ever need to talk or anything I am here. Love always ~ Amanda Destiny~ The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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