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jytree
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0 posted 2001-03-07 10:35 PM


Making mistakes in how I learn in life,
Yet no change with me it is beyond the price,
Eirre walk of untime death,
Walking in the line one fire with no regrets,

Surly be as Surly done,
Beyond the gates time for fun,
What is this place,
Where do I stand,

Pressed beyond this mortal coral,
Meeting people for have sinned and with no morals,
I stand in front the gates of fate,
Waiting until the time they open so I can take my place,

I am wisked beyond endless moutains and beyond the seas,
And beyond the gates I can step free,

Beyond the fire the burns in my soul,
Beyond my temper the make me lose control,
Even beyond life all itself,

Beyond the gates just set free,
Beyond the gates come with me.


Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



© Copyright 2001 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-03-07 11:01 PM


Ahh! Library piece!
And your very best. I am serious!
This was outstanding, Jay! Give yourself a pat on the back!
~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan


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2 posted 2001-03-07 11:46 PM


I am very happy that you liked it I was wondering because my mind just froze towards the end

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



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3 posted 2001-03-09 04:36 PM


wow
this is really good
really amazing thoughts
keep writing my friend

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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4 posted 2001-03-09 04:36 PM


Wow, odd how only Allan has replied to this. Wonderful poem. Back to Page 1!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-03-09 05:56 PM


Wow! This is a great piece! This is going straight into my library!

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

jytree
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6 posted 2001-03-09 07:24 PM


thanks I was starting to wonder if anyone was going to relpy

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



Greeneyes617
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7 posted 2001-03-09 09:53 PM


Well done Jay. Nice poem.
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8 posted 2001-03-10 02:09 PM


*****speechless******

Just remember even if I cant say something in reply that sometimes not saying anything at all has the most meaning.... sorry I really am speechless right now.

The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny

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9 posted 2001-03-10 09:11 PM


yes I know angel I get quiet sometimes too.
yet with even saying nothing only your reply show me that you liked it

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



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10 posted 2001-03-13 11:54 AM


Well, Angel..you could always be like me when I get speechless.. I just go like this (cause I'm speechless now too )

Ditto! Jay..this was a very powerful poem! I'm glad to see you are getting better in your poetry. Thanks for being my friend

[This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 03-13-2001).]

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