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i gave it back
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i gave it back |
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coalesce New Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 9canada |
as much as i'd like to take back what i've given up so easily. as bad as i thrive for the same to happen to you. i drownd eagerly in guilt awaiting on the thought of swallowing this ache in my lung. just as easy, i'll spit it back at you. so take all you want, i'm already torn apart and sure that one last tear will feel just the same. if i could only leave you with one thought, i'd put this all on you. and here i'll stand, a shattered soul, stand tall enough to wait for my turn. so quit while your ahead, or in return i'd do the same to you. raped of hope i lie here, knowing that i've mended the scars of greed and replaced them with a void. i gave it back. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions!! I thought this poem completely rocked. It was so wonderfully written. The style is quite interesting and I hope to see you post around here more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a really deep poem, full of powerful emotions. I really hope you regain that hope that this person took from you. Good work! PS-check your e-mail  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Welcome and all that blah blah The poem RULES! I absolutely LOVE this!!! Thank you for writing this because it can help a friend of mine SOOO much right now! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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FallNTears Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 20 |
Welcome to Passions!! This poem was very thought prvoking. Thats a good thing. Keep it up!! *Me* *Having a nightmare is nothing compared to living one.* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This poem is quite good. I think the last line was well thought-out. Welcome to Passions. I hope you learn a lot and enjoy your time here. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Great way to start things off here. I can see I'm going to like you. Keep posting. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
yes yes...   Welcome To Passions Wonderful first post, lots of emotions throughout. Great job Keep it up*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Nice to see you've decided to join here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you enjoy sharing as well as reading. Your first post has strong words in it you have expressed yourself real well keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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